poetry other than yours

some nights there is nothing more than her on my mind

what use to write of anything other?

sapid verses prevented recitation

by my clutching throat in retaliation;

no sufferable mentions, but of thee my lover.

no use! no use! will alleviation service me?

this night I fear your touch does evade,

thou absent kiss, a distant renegade;

solicitude has enervated me this eve.

lovesick retching in anxiety assailing,

fear another motif will not meet my pen

until our lips have duly banded (if even then),

thou lips and voice unwontedly prevailing;

perhaps no other verse shall I ever write again,

poetry other than yours wrought but not availing.

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Oh boy somebody's got it bad....I love the concept here and you've written it with your own style and grace, missing someone so much has never been sweeter.

[m.s.early]

(: that noticeable huh? :)

[Frieda P]

Ha, just a teeny bit ;-)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Well who says you have to write about anything else.You write so beautifully and understandably.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you vidya. your comments are gracious and kind :)

[Linda alexander]

perhaps no other verse shall I ever write again,
poetry other than yours wrought but not availing.

Great write, vividly expressed the lover who is love sick and paralyzed by the thoughts of dream person, visualization is very easy, many will relate to this poem easily, poem succeeded in it's message to project the helplessness of lovesick lover, impressed

[m.s.early]

(: thank you. so astute Linda :)

[Linda alexander]

You welcome, take care

[Claire in VA]

Oh wow! To be the subject of this verse!
This is gigantic. Powerful to the nth degree.
I hope the narrator will find a way to continue to write.
I don't have any suggestions.
Applauding........Claire :)

[m.s.early]

(: Gigantic? Powerful? You're too much, but thank you. I'm sure he'll still write, but difficultly other than of her :)

[Claire in VA]

Thank goodness ;-)