your verses drip from your lips

your verses drip from your lips like crystals,

tinkling slurry syllables hushing all others,

silencing meadows, springtime airs,

priming my atmosphere awaiting your arrival.

Reviews

[redflutterby]

Verses so powerful that everything else ceases....amazing words in this poem!! Enjoyed it. ;-)

[DaughterNature]

This packs a punch in a few lines, well written! The word "slurry" confuses me a little, since everything else gives the feeling of crispness (crystal, tinkling, spring, etc). When I read "slurry," my mind anticipated drunken poetry, but I feel that is not the case. Otherwise, a nicely striking image with very few words!

[m.s.early]

Maybe you are thinking 'slurring' rather than 'slurry' which is fluid that is insoluble. So not only are the words crisp, but cannot be diluted.

[Mockingbird]

your lexical ability to blend obscure words into verse is amazing. you'll make the most dissonant phrases melodious just by succinctly conveying the sentiment behind them and adding tangible images of nature. in few words you elicit awe and anticipation of something just out of reach. it is a lovely read.

[DaughterNature]

Oh, I know what slurry is, I was just explaining where the sound of the word took my brain. And, as you mention, a slurry is a goopy unincorporated mixture, is still sounds less crisp to me. However, as always, the poem belongs to you!

[Mockingbird]

i find slurry to be phonetically alluring. being insoluble proclaims a bond that is untouched by impurity or time. you can't get more undiluted than a single morpheme contained in a syllable powerful enough to silence even 'springtime airs.'

[Mollie Fitzner]

"...drip from your lips like crystals.." already a sensuous feel to the poem...line two: alliteration (I think that is the label) ...lines 2 & 3 ...the POWER that is given to the speaker/poet...and "...awaiting your arrival" only makes me think there has to be a part II....I cannot wait to know what will happen next..or am I to imagine?

[Sami Khalil]

"your verses drip from your lips like crystals,
tinkling slurry syllables hushing all others,
silencing meadows, springtime airs,
priming my atmosphere awaiting your arrival."

[Jack...]

My friend, you say so much in so few words. Very nice.

[Claire in VA]

Beautiful.
I like succinctly written poems.
Best poet on WC.
~Claire in VA

[m.s.early]

(: thank you claire, but you're much too generous. there are many poets much more skilled and expertise'd in this field :)

[Claire in VA]

Let me rephrase that. You are definitely one of the best that I have read on WC.
I mean it.read moreLet me rephrase that. You are definitely one of the best that I have read on WC.
I mean it.
~Claire

[m.s.early]

(: thank you for your kindness :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is truly lovely .I hope she arrives soon :)

[m.s.early]

(: thank you vidya... me too :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[Sami Khalil]

Falling in love with a poetic persona and her writes. Waiting anxiously for her writes too...A wonderful write...:)............

[m.s.early]

(: thank you sami! :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).....................

[AYVID N]

An exquisite expression of waiting, for love to arrive. The words fill the mind with pictures of a beautiful spring and all the good that it brings with it.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you so much divya :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and when you arrive, i will finally breathe again...

four lines of intense passion and love...

loving a poet.

[m.s.early]

(: Loving a poet Jacob... Isn't that a wonderful thing?!?! Is this the narrator loving the poet, or how the narrator wishes she loved him? Thank you for reading :)