i like the incongruity of the fish getting bigger the further away from the bank they are. or am i looking at it from the wrong side of the bank. is it like the rearview mirrors on the outside. it's trippy nonetheless. i get bored and annoyed around friends who are hammered. yes. hammered.
This is a really nice expansion on a moment, love the way you described the shots. The only word that feels out of place is "hammered." It definitely describes the character, but when you're using such awesome imagery to describe other parts of the scene, it seems a shame to fall back on this piece of slang.
pissing contests and exaggerated fish stories...yes, drunk at the time, but some indication of how he is in real life...because we are who we really are after a few drinks...at least that is the consensus...
you weave really good poems...you don't waste any words, and each one you use is visual and compelling.
Some one is fully drunk, filled shots partly between his shirt and the juke box, spit dripping his goatee, and try to catch fish, and fishing became utter failure and his friend got bored and annoyed,can visualize, if it is me i would have mildly kicked him as he may forget when he is sober, how cool you narrated this fish story, enjoyed
"A poet's work is to name the unnameable, to point at frauds, to take sides, start arguments, shape the world, and stop it going to sleep."
-Salman Rushdie more..