binary system

binary system

A Poem by m.s.early

two divorced by space absolutely devoid of anything,
their parallel quiddity noticed by the eternal cosmic mind,
their oscillating harmonies opposing mellifluous rhymes,
obfuscated the probability of the dilettantes even considering
that the two celestial entities were destined to convene;
the distance was impossible, yet the two still oblivious
to their fate found their wellspring regardless how contemptuous
inasmuch as the two would discover 'twas more in store it seems.
the universe's omnipotence extends beyond empirical brain
for resistance was but a conception between the two luminaries.
becoming congruously bound, elliptical revolutionaries,
destiny manifested and their stellar hearts sweetly strained.
the two married their gravity, stuck fast in orbital adversary
while stellar tethers reverberated in intergalactic refrain.

© 2014 m.s.early


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binary system
m.s.early,
Looking to the wonders of the heavens:
'for resistance was but a conception between the two luminaries.'
I got stuck on above line. The whole piece is full of clues to infinity, eternity and how all depends on the unity in all. So saying all that to say this I as many find the harmony between moon and sun. The greater light to rule the day...lesser light to rule the night...
These two luminaries need each other and so much more are the other mysterious steller systems. Clever writing!
Blessings,
Kathy

Posted 7 Months Ago


Amazing diction, and extremely good usage of it! It almost sounds like a love story for a brief moment ^^)

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you. it certainly is a love story. two inconceivable lovers drawn together by destiny to re.. read more
I really, really like this! There's so much tug-and-pull going on, literally and figuratively! The use of caesura in some of the lines is good, it meters out the rhythm and the speed of the piece. Also, the language is just so wonderful, good use of crazy vocabulary words to make it feel more weighty (gravity) but also "higher" (intellectually and also galactically). Masterfully done! I will say, though it might be nitpicky, that if you're going to use periods, there should probably be capital letters somewhere...!

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you so much :)
Your pieces your thought process interest me

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: I hope that's a good thing. thank you aristede :)
the two married their gravity, stuck fast in orbital adversary
while stellar tethers reverberated in intergalactic refrain
Superb poem, even if both are in their own independent orbit, reverberation is intense and felt in galaxy.
So that much strong bond existing between two beyond the limitation of separation based on empirical brain, what a lucky or unlucky two candidates when we weigh in lay mans point of view, I may conclude lucky as their relation is so magnificent, wonderful job

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you for getting it. I really appreciate that. Some relationships simply can not be predicte.. read more
Linda alexander

10 Years Ago

You most welcome, but we need to learn to walk without being an unnecessary victim of criticisms and.. read more
m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: indeed linda. thank you again :)
"the universe's omnipotence extends beyond empirical brain

for resistance was but a conception between the two luminaries"

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)............

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you sami :)
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

You are welcome...:)...............
A mouthful for sure. I will have to rest with this one a bit. :) Peace.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you for reading kl :)

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Added on January 25, 2014
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