the bard's lonely heart

if Shakespeare's heart, crack-shattered, fluttering about

lingering lofty pieces, eternal, sun dripping pearls of gold,

love's unrequited tragic stance, within the heart to hold,

the gardener's gift, a poisoned fable, spoiled and round and stout,

a hint too brief to be believed, cast with a touch of doubt,

softly spoken wind dried verses creased with ageless folds,

the unrelenting hands of time relieve (or so we're told),

but i would rather fall dead myself, having lived without.

if heaven's mystery dispelled upon a tempered  spirit,

those comely cheeks soft brushed but wounded, jaded

porcelain ears upon that heart, but pulse too faint to hear it.

the bard though gone a thousand  years, yet voice is ever timely;

the lost, dejected, forlornly reposed, whitewashed and faded,

will seek forever as if worlds away no matter how closely near it.

Author's Note

be gentle, this is my very first sonnet

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'the bard's lonely heart'
m.s. early,
Such an honest portrayal above; of the themes a person has come to know from the works of Shakespeare. Themes of life in the past and now- not changing. Some of the phrases which I associate with his poetic and passionate writing..'sun dripping pearls of gold , a poisoned fable, spoiled and round and stout,dispelled upon a tempered spirit, those comely cheeks soft brushed but wounded, jaded porcelain ears upon that heart, but pulse to faint to hear it....a poem with a winsome rise and fall and some really nice rhyming at the ends of your sentences. All in all a poem that made me smile.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Mockingbird]

you have a way with words in any genre. the language is polished and elegant. a perspicacious view of the bard's wisdom (questioned?). intimations of foreclosed gratification. it was a pleasure to read.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you mockingbird :)

[Frieda P]

Great opener in this sonnet...I don't know which line I like best, they're all compelling. Well done xavier.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you Frieda :)

[Frieda P]

I don't think I'd even attempt a sonnet so you get high marks from me! ;-)

[Lyn Anderson]

a solid tribute - difficult to encompass it all - I would be tempted to put "porcelain ears upon thine heart" and take out the parentheses around (or so we're told), other than that, the only thing I can see is an extra spacing after a thousand years. A great job. By the way, writing nearly exclusively free verse, I never worry about the structure, just how I feel, and this is a splendid job.

[m.s.early]

Thanks KL. I like the "thine" suggestio. It sounds softer and sounds more "Shakespearean". But I like my parenthesis :) I appreciate the constructive criticism.

[Lyn Anderson]

You are very welcome, and as always, writer's privilege rules.

[Ruth]

Good god! This spins me in a good way, whew! x

[Jack...]

I think you did a great job on this one my friend and your words resonated with me. I liked the feel of this and the thoughts of I would rtaher have had and lost, than to not have had at all.

[m.s.early]

Thank you very much Jack. :)