frozen bird

i wasn't prepared 

the horror of your wings 

stiffening

the peril watching you 

relive your life

your eyes black and cold

the sun refused

the wind relented

i couldn't catch you

the fall -- the shatter

splintered bones 

clicked the concrete

tears rise in steam

i'm still staring

at my empty hands

Reviews

[Tam Warink]

Allegorical, metaphorical or literal - that is the question? I'm going to go with all three. When I do, well there's no turning back, is there? I'm going to go with the thought that there's a little bit of truth in each path and leave it at that. You do good work, Xavier.

100 empty hands

[m.s.early]

(: thank you tam :)

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'frozen bird'
m.s.early,
Pure from the inner place the heart.
Giving way to rawness, nothing else to do.
All that is left is to process reality. To give in.
'Stiffened wings, eyes black and cold.'
The fall the loss;
'splintered bones
clicked the concrete'
Faced with a new phase-season;
'I'm still staring
at my empty hands'
To much loss all around. This was good one
for me to read. Thank you.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

The hardest parts of a healer's life are the ones you can't help......Don't forget YOUR FREAKING AMAZING though! This one rocked!

[MoriartyMesa]

I felt a haunt of The Civil War, a frozen winter of 63, and a soldier looking for a fire and finding something more.


I liked this, what!

[Claire in VA]

A++ Analogy

~Claire in VA

[Lyn Anderson]

This perhaps is my fave of yours so far - very sad and dark. I picture trying to save someone that wasn't supposed to be saved in the first place.

[m.s.early]

(: thank you KL. on point as usual :)

[Pbrgrim]

Deep and emotional I felt the pain of the piece

[m.s.early]

(: thank you pbr :)

[Desiree]

Amaze! Great imagery ;) I liked it so much I had to re-read it!

[m.s.early]

(: Thank you Desiree :)

[:o]

This is a sad image. tears rise in steam i'm still staring at my empty hands. Those end lines stir up the feeling of hopelessness one feels when they know its over and they never had a chance to even help. This is a moving poem from you.

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much!

[Frieda P]

Stark imagery, I could take this beyond a frozen bird to a life plummeting mid flight...nicely pen'd xavier!

[m.s.early]

Thank you so much Freida.

[Frieda P]

The pleasure was mine xavier.