photograph

Your photograph makes me want to kiss you

In a way that only lovers know. 

It’s the way your eyes shine like emeralds

On skin as soft as snow,

Or the smile of an angel placed perfectly between

The stars in the sky and a place I found in a dream.

Your lips are placed perfectly as if by God’s own hand

With a precious perfection that only He could command.

If I could reach through that picture 

And touch your sweet face,

I’d take you away

To some far away place,

That only we would know and could always return.

But ‘til then I’m left wanting with painful yearn.

You glow like a flame behind soft painted glass

With a timeless quality that will never pass.

Your silver chain clasped behind the nape of your neck,

Where I long to kiss with deepness of breath.

Your shoulders barely showing at the length of your hair

I remember when I kissed them in a moment we shared.

If I could hold you forever would it be long enough?

No my sweet flower, no it would not be enough.

Reviews

[David Scott]

I will tell you I shoot straight...
I loved the poem... until the last line. I feel like you just got lazy and did not think of a better way to say what you wanted without using the same word... Rhyming "enough" with "enough" is not hard work. :)

Sorry. I gotta keep it real.
The thought and your delivery show an infatuation to be sure. You give the reader a fine picture of this dream love of yours. With a little work, you could give this poem some better structure and make this write very special.

Not hating it, but if I were a teacher you would have to work harder for an A.

[m.s.early]

Thank you for your candid review. To be honest, I think this poem and content is juvenile compared to my other pieces I've posted and was going to delete it before any of the writers I reviewed today read it.

Perhaps I'll let it stay because of the humbling review or remove it because of its lack of consistency with the other pieces.

[David Scott]

I hope not to humble but rather to encourage. Love is often "juvenile". Even with grandparents...
The poem has promise or I would have said I thought it was not worth reading. I would not delete this poem. I would simply spend a few minuets reworking this thought because it is worth the effort to do so.
I post "green" work all the time. Feel free to teach me as well. I think this is why we share and review, to learn.
Also, others may think I'm nuts and love it just like it is... This is only my opinion remember. I am not an authority at all. I am simply honest.
Thank you for accepting my honesty with openness. :)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

This is the real you ....in all that you are...you possess in X. Silver...Im just a girl..in love with love.

[lost girl]

Memories in photographs...sometimes sweet...sometimes sorrowful. This is a pretty lil piece. I got a shiver in a few of it's lines. There are a few things that need to be a lil tighter but all in all I enjoyed it :) Is this where you got your name?

[MoriartyMesa]

Very insightful and at the same time why do I feel like you wanted to say more rather than pose a feeling. It was good, but I think this was meant for someone, a bit deeper than willing to admit, what?

[Coyote Poetry]

"If I could hold you forever would it be long enough?
No my sweet flower, no it would not be enough."
I enjoyed complete poem. The description of photo, nape of neck make the poem have life and story. A perfect ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[justjenn_2u]

A picture speaks a thousand words, I have heard and I found to be true. The first four lines speak of gentleness with pure yearning. Soft words throughout the entire piece exude just how beautiful softness and raw romance can climb mountains. I feel the flow is not forced throughout the poem with descriptive sentences that allow me, being the reader, to take a step back and have dreamy thoughts. Good piece. Write on!!!!

[Kyle]

I love the vivid imagery in this poem. The contrast between "skin soft as snow" and the eyes "like emeralds" creates an amazingly vivid image in the reader's mind. The other metaphors are wonderful as well. The way you weave your words makes the scenes jump perfectly into my mind. It feels like I'm watching a video, instead of reading a poem. Great job!

[I Am Svetlana]

Ah, photographs...they bring back so many memories, be it good or bad. They always let us capture and remember a moment in the past. They help us see lost faces, reconnect and cherish those precious moments...sometimes we want those certain times back.