in the alley

in the alley

A Poem by m.s.early

His long dark cloak

He, the absence of light

His shadow broken only by the ember

    of his cigarette

© 2014 m.s.early


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It seems we are kin... he and I.....my silhouette only shines by the moon.

Posted 8 Years Ago


You have created great mind imagery in the alley with few lines. Excellent...:).......

Posted 10 Years Ago


there is this understated foreboding in this poem...in so few words you have created a fine image of someone in a dark alley...thank you for sharing :)


Posted 10 Years Ago


there is this understated foreboding in this poem...in so few words you have created a fine image of someone in a dark alley...thank you for sharing :)


Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: thank you so much :)
A interesting poem. I like the dark feel to the poem. You did very well using so few words to create vision and danger. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: Thanks Coyote :)
'he himself the absence of light' ...i picture a vampire gentleman in a foggy 19th century english alley waiting to seduce a lady. exquisite imagery. i always say that, don't i? but you really are the master of imagery.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

Thank you. I was hesitant over that line. I almost thought it was immature and had thought about edi.. read more
Almost like the opening to a Mickey Spillane novel. Very cool my friend.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: Thank you Jack :)
4 lines which are confounding. Mostly I see a dark person who is but just a mystery. Simple piece which spells out loneliness. I like it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: Thank you Jen :)
Now this is an A.
Not typical. Visual in many ways.
I like the thought of and ember breaking the shadow here.
I like reading this without the last "His". Just starting the line with "Shadow" works very well I think.
Love this one!

Posted 10 Years Ago


m.s.early

10 Years Ago

(: Thank you David :)

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