In Time

I really don't consider this to be a poem, just something that ran through my mind and I just wrote it down. Maybe a long thought ... Yes, that's seems to make sense to me.

Watch me cry with all that I've got

See me crawl into a liar's arms

Empty and full of nothing but loneliness

My eyes are wide open and all I see is black

My ears have been clear forever and I hear steady ringing

I'll be fine though - time will go by

I will stand on the broken glass

Walk through the acid filled tunnels

Then step up to the world

I'm going to use everything in my past

In the end, I will illuminate strength

Author's Note

Just a random, rather long, thought. Give me your opinion on it.

Reviews

[Spit_and_Prayers]

The thought is a bit muddled in parts, but I think I get the basic idea. A commentary on how one can live there lives trying to take in everything and yet absorb nothing perhaps? Just another thought I suppose.

[Creepy Swine Guy]

My opinion is this ... I thought it was a poem ... an excellent poem. It speaks to some hurt without being whiney. It speaks to loneliness without being whiney. My only suggestion would be this ... I would add punctuation. You see since you wrote it, you hear it in your head with all of the appropriate stops and pauses (line breaks do not necessarily indicate pauses or stops in poems). We don't know how it is supposed to sound though. We are at a disadvantage because we didn't write it. The punctuation acts as instructions on how to read it for us.

But I digress! I loved the grace and rationality in the face of hurt that you show with this poem; the descriptions are on point and the sadness was palpable. Excellent write.

[Voice]

You truly have no idea how much I can relate to this poem...and not just because that is me in the picture (though that is cool). Though sometimes we completely confuse each other I really do believe that we are very similar...after all you are my Mexican sister from another Mr. :)

Carol

[Drifter]

I like random long thoughts. They're more honest, or at least it seems that way. I agree that this does exude strength. To me, it says that whatever comes can try to kick my a*s, but I shall persevere.

[ICE]

Amazing! You exude strength. By the end of this piece you got through it all...and became a better person for it.

[Bud]

This is far from random, in my opinion. It is very poetic, as well. In a small space with few words, you have made a statement that takes a lifetime of negative experiences and poured a heavenly dose of optimism onto it. Declaring to the world that you have not been beat...but won!

"I will stand on the broken glass
Walk through the acid filled tunnels
Then step up to the world
I'm going to use everything in my past
In the end, I will illuminate strength"

Your emotion comes through loud and clear with this piece of art that you have created...I was drawn into it as I read...my own emotions stirring. Outstanding write and work of art! Keep up the Amazing works of talent!

[Tallulah]

i love this. i think it was beautiful and so well written.

[Marlena]

Beautiful you really captured something great here.

[Lexi Nicole]

I love it! It's beautiful and brilliant. You really captured a strong emotion and I like the strength that finishes it off. Great work!

-Howl

[Taylor H]

Brillant poem! i've been trying to write a poem about myself for a little while now and it doesnt seam to be working lol. Great job