The Wrong Ending

Something that you would never expect or want to happen.

 

It started with those first few words

“My dear, you are lovely”

My breath caught and my heart raced

I had to have you, I was desperate

There was nothing about you I didn’t want

 

Next, the kiss of possession

The hairs on my neck rose

I could hear the pounding of drums

Your devilish smile made me quiver

Everything spun out of control

 

Later, your arms claimed me

Body and soul – I belonged to you

Sight, smell, taste, touch, and hearing

You surrounded me in every way

Silently I tried to get away, but I couldn’t breathe

 

Nearing the end, punishment of love

I hurt myself for your affection

You pushed me and pulled me down to you

I could see the changing of the tracks

Soon I lost my voice and mind

 

Finally, the beautiful death of you

Never would I have thought it would end this way

My love smothered you without hesitation

I was left in a state of confusion

It wasn’t supposed to be you…

Author's Note

Tell me what you think!

Reviews

[Bud]

Amazing piece of work...the ending was an excellent twist.

[Winter McPherson]

Really good! So captures the suffocating, mind confusing, soul shattering thing that is obssession/love. Yes, we never want it to end that way.......smothering the beloved. This was excellent......one of your best!

[Kiara]

fell in love with the ending of this poem ha ha:)
you express amazingly! I really enjoyed this one
-arabella

[MyDearRobby]

thIs iS AwEsOmE!i LoVe iT!iTs SaD tOO, AnD I tHiNk u MeAn "SiGhT" InStEaD Of "sIgH" bUt iTs rEaLLy AwESoMe i ReAllY LIKe THiS!:)

[closed]

Wow this is a really beautifully written poem. I like the saddening twist near the end, I really enjoyed it. You are a very talented writer :)

[justjenn_2u]

I like the concept behind this poem and the lesson learned.

I especially like the closure - "It wasn't supposed to be you."

Very well written!

[Voice]

You are a liar liar plants for hire� ha-ha SpongeBob

Told you that you could write good

Voice/u know who