Difference

The beautiful lush green ground
rolling all over as far as the eye can see,
the horizon can be seen
through many thick lines.
the sky is green, littered with blue.
The sky moves fast with the wind,
silently blaring around.

The dull colors begs to be ignored
with the black and gray ground
with towering lines that reaches the sky
that's blue with a faint green of pollute.

With the chirping of the creatures
interrupting the oh so silent peace.
The creatures are so far spaced
that it takes a long time to see
a menacing creature.

The creatures here are a scary thing.
With their laughing and screaming from the small ones,
some location loud popping noises can be heard
with agonizing or fearful screaming.
Sometimes there's a loud wailing noises
roaring on the streets
along with the other large roaring creatures
that carries the small creatures inside.

Author's Note

Not really done right now, need to add more but none the less what do you think?

Reviews

[Autumn]

This is a really interesting poem, different from what I've seen so far. Although repetition is used in poems very often, in my opinion the word "creature" could be replaced in the last verse.
But very good so far!