Heartbeat

Heartbeat

A Poem by TheMalady
"

There is always a first time for everything.

"






"Who are you?"



Did you not whisper those?

Under playful shadows of the Willow,

The sky closing down to dusk

While the wind howls in unison.



"Let's walk together..."



A lullaby

Drifting and swallowed 

By the beating music of heart

And splashing crimson of Love.




"Until tomorrow then."



Promises, pinky swear

Eyes flickering

As you stare straight into mine

A fleeting memory - forever it will mark.







-TheMalady 

© 2016 TheMalady


Author's Note

TheMalady
Hello! >_<

You know that sensation when you had your first time?
Well, especially when you meet someone that makes your heart go 'doki-doki?'

Any feed backs? I will be glad if you could share them. :)


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i was pinky sworn with a couple loves...but they must have had their toes crossed...false promises...but that first time is always significant...and we believe...as we grow older and become jaded---we have trouble believing...
but i like the hopeful mood of this ...the time of innocence and "maybe this is it?" feeling.

and i like those separate lines...a poem within the poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot! I'm glad for your honest review and for liking this poem. Again, thanks a lot! :)



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Emotions given detail with every word you wrote! Loved how you framed this one by quoting the lines ;)
Great read.. Expressive and relative piece of poetry..

Thanks for sharing.. Keep writing! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Haha, your praise just warm up my heart. I'm very happy to you like this one. And you are very welco.. read more
well planned poetry !!! i love this !! have an outstanding touch ! keep it up
great work

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Z.F! I'm happy that you love this one. :)
Beautifully penned and the imagery is profoundly expressed. Love, the most beautiful yet controversial emotion. And you glorified it by your pen. :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much, Blackheart! Your praises are well-received. I'm very happy that you appreciate .. read more
This is beautiful, I loved the imagery. Well penned

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for reading. I'm happy that you loved it. :)
A very lovely, soft work. Well done. Great flow and imagery. The feeling of love comes through very strong.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for reading. Your review means a lot to me. :)
I've never referred to it as doki-doki, : ) but I know what you mean and your poems expresses that feeling nicely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


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TheMalady

8 Years Ago

Haha, you're definitely right. I just referred to as doki-doki. Aw geez... Thanks again. I just like.. read more

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Added on January 24, 2016
Last Updated on January 30, 2016
Tags: Innocence, Heartbeat, Bloom, Memory

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