Heartbeat

There is always a first time for everything.

"Who are you?"

Did you not whisper those?

Under playful shadows of the Willow,

The sky closing down to dusk

While the wind howls in unison.

"Let's walk together..."

A lullaby

Drifting and swallowed 

By the beating music of heart

And splashing crimson of Love.

"Until tomorrow then."

Promises, pinky swear

Eyes flickering

As you stare straight into mine

A fleeting memory - forever it will mark.

-TheMalady 

Author's Note

Hello! >_<

You know that sensation when you had your first time?
Well, especially when you meet someone that makes your heart go 'doki-doki?'

Any feed backs? I will be glad if you could share them. :)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was pinky sworn with a couple loves...but they must have had their toes crossed...false promises...but that first time is always significant...and we believe...as we grow older and become jaded---we have trouble believing...
but i like the hopeful mood of this ...the time of innocence and "maybe this is it?" feeling.

and i like those separate lines...a poem within the poem.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot! I'm glad for your honest review and for liking this poem. Again, thanks a lot! :)

[Riddhi]

Oh! That is really a nice poem....keep it up and thanks for sharing...

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, riddhi! I'm very happy for the time you've spent to read this. Thanks a lot! I'll keep on writing ;)

[θεά]

Oh the ephemarility of time, the eternity of memories and eventuality of promises.
Beautifully rendered.
Very poetic. Very lyrical. Very poignant.

Great read.

Best,
M.

[TheMalady]

Oh my... Your praises are very charming! I'm quite flattered that you like this. Thanks a lot for taking your time on reading my work. I truly appreciate it :)

[NeuroVersifier]

I love the effect this had on me. It transported me back to my youth and triggered fond memories of when my world was young and more magical. Thanks for taking me back there. I really like your writing style.

[TheMalady]

I'm quite glad that it made you feel that way! Thank you very much for the time you've given to read this. I truly appreciate it. :)

[NeuroVersifier]

A pleasure.

[Zyle Christian William ..]

I love this. I like how innocent it is and it inspires me to add simple love to my own story, though I would have to be careful not to force it! Nicely written Malady, pure and simple and elegant.

[TheMalady]

Aw, I'm very happy that this poem inspired you to include a simple love to your story. Haha, your praise is quite an encouragement for me. Thanks a lot! :)

[Zyle Christian William Cook]

No problem! I enjoy your poems! I was nonplussed that this one had no mention of color in it! teehee

[V]

This is lovely. The words are so delightful. The description of nature in the first stanza or the comparison of music in the second one. The last stanza becomes more personal, physical but still it creates nice feelings.

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much! I'm very happy that you liked this. Thanks again for reading. I truly appreciate your time for reading this. :)

[V]

You're welcome. :)

[Deanna M.]

Really enjoyed reading this. This definitely captures the feelings for the first time, and when someones heart beats fast. This is a poem about love, and it's well written!!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, Deanna M.! I'm glad that you loved this! Thanks a lot again, I truly appreciate it. :)

[KBW]

Nicely written. Enjoyable read!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, KBW. I'm very happy that you enjoyed this! :)

[Mary Helda]

Awww my dear,a very sweet and lovely poem..i always like the way you play around with words,imagery is great...this made me smile...

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, M.H.A! I'm very glad that you liked this! You flatter me with your words. :) Thanks a lot for reading! :)

[Mary Helda]

you are welcome :-)

[Lalochezia]

As always, great imagery! 'Wind howling in unison' - I like it!
Also the pinky swear, an endearing element which made me smile.

The only thing I would change is 'As you stare straight INTO mine'.

[TheMalady]

Thanks for reading, Lalochezia! I'm very flattered to know that you like this. Sure! Thanks a lot for pointing this out. As usual, you've got keen eyes! :)

[Solar]

There is a softness to this poem which is tempered with a bit of edge [eg. howling wind, splash of crimson, making a mark] in the fourth line of each stanza.

I like how you have paced the verses - making it a good read.

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much, Solar! I really appreciate the time you've given to read and review my poem. It means a lot to me. Thanks a lot! :)

[Solar]

You are most welcome TheMalady - will definitely be following.

[TheMalady]

Aw... Thanks a lot! I'm quite honored to hear that from such an exquisite writer as you! You're encouraging me to write further! Thanks a lot :)