Heartbeat

There is always a first time for everything.

"Who are you?"

Did you not whisper those?

Under playful shadows of the Willow,

The sky closing down to dusk

While the wind howls in unison.

"Let's walk together..."

A lullaby

Drifting and swallowed 

By the beating music of heart

And splashing crimson of Love.

"Until tomorrow then."

Promises, pinky swear

Eyes flickering

As you stare straight into mine

A fleeting memory - forever it will mark.

-TheMalady 

Author's Note

Hello! >_<

You know that sensation when you had your first time?
Well, especially when you meet someone that makes your heart go 'doki-doki?'

Any feed backs? I will be glad if you could share them. :)

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i was pinky sworn with a couple loves...but they must have had their toes crossed...false promises...but that first time is always significant...and we believe...as we grow older and become jaded---we have trouble believing...
but i like the hopeful mood of this ...the time of innocence and "maybe this is it?" feeling.

and i like those separate lines...a poem within the poem.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot! I'm glad for your honest review and for liking this poem. Again, thanks a lot! :)

[Lola Nad]

"A lullaby
Drifting and swallowed
By the beating music of heart
And splashing crimson of Love."
I really, really, really like this part. It's a really good poem all in all but this part is really what captured me ^^ well done!!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, Black Rose! I am happy that this stanza capture your attention. Thanks a lot for reading! I'm sorry for replying so late. I've been busy. :P

[Lavorther]

I like the bold lines in between the stanzas. You have managed to capture a beautiful moment in only a handful of sentences. Really impressive.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, friend! I'm glad you liked this. I really appreciate the time you've given to read this poem. Thanks a lot! :)

[Insight "MH"]

The wording in this piece is majestic, lovely from top to bottom.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, Insight! I'm glad you find this majestic. It really is an honor to be praised in such a manner. Thanks a lot for the time in reading this piece. Thanks you! :)

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome, and it's well deserved.

[Martin]

I love this style! The imagery of the flickering eyes was amazing!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, Martin! I'm happy you liked this. Thanks for the awesome read! :)

[Kira]

This is great! Amazing work!1

[TheMalady]

Thanks Kira! I'm very happy that you like this. And thanks again for taking your time to read this poem. :)

[Naajia Collins]

i loved it ! you did such a great job it was very deep and i instantly got the message

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, N.C! I'm glad you loved this. :)

[Naajia Collins]

your welcome

[Obscured by the Shadows]

Such a beautiful piece of work, full of wonder and mystery. I love it. Full ratings dear friend.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, dear friend! I am happy that you love this. :)

[Greg Agee]

A magical moment in time. Memories, love your way, it's fresh and hopeful. Thanks for the picture now playing in mind...

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, Greg Agee! I am happy that you love this. :)

[Emily]

Great poem!!
I loved it!
Keep on writing!!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, Emily. I'm glad you liked this one.