Hi! I just wanted to write down something about today. This one's a bit melancholic. Any feed backs? Anyone who can relate to this one? I'd be very happy for any thoughts. :)
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To be honest, being an anime nerd, I can't help but picture this in the ways many anime portray similar situations! I liked this piece; it's adorable and honest. We all dream and make dreams with others, but sometimes those dreams don't reach fulfillment because a good-bye had happened. Distance is funny, it's the one thing that can take a dream that's been carefully crafted and cause it to become unraveled. Nice work, Mal!
Thanks a lot, BThomvanWart! I'm glad that it left that kind of impression to you. I really appreciat.. read moreThanks a lot, BThomvanWart! I'm glad that it left that kind of impression to you. I really appreciate your time for reading this work and yes! This is indeed inspired from my years of watching anime and reading manga. haha :D
8 Years Ago
That's awesome! I love it that much more! Haha. You're welcome! I'm glad I could stop by and check o.. read moreThat's awesome! I love it that much more! Haha. You're welcome! I'm glad I could stop by and check out your work~
8 Years Ago
Thanks a lot! I'll stop by to yours and check your awesome write-ups as well! :)
I like the way you put this poem together with the first word leaving an impact as the relationship changes from beginning to end. It's a very relatable subject as most people go through failed relationships at least once in their lives - well done! :)
To be honest, being an anime nerd, I can't help but picture this in the ways many anime portray similar situations! I liked this piece; it's adorable and honest. We all dream and make dreams with others, but sometimes those dreams don't reach fulfillment because a good-bye had happened. Distance is funny, it's the one thing that can take a dream that's been carefully crafted and cause it to become unraveled. Nice work, Mal!
Thanks a lot, BThomvanWart! I'm glad that it left that kind of impression to you. I really appreciat.. read moreThanks a lot, BThomvanWart! I'm glad that it left that kind of impression to you. I really appreciate your time for reading this work and yes! This is indeed inspired from my years of watching anime and reading manga. haha :D
8 Years Ago
That's awesome! I love it that much more! Haha. You're welcome! I'm glad I could stop by and check o.. read moreThat's awesome! I love it that much more! Haha. You're welcome! I'm glad I could stop by and check out your work~
8 Years Ago
Thanks a lot! I'll stop by to yours and check your awesome write-ups as well! :)
A beautiful poem, I loved how every stanza started with just one word. It flowed really well too.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thanks a lot, Lavorther! Thanks for the time you took to read this. I'm happy that you loved this. :.. read moreThanks a lot, Lavorther! Thanks for the time you took to read this. I'm happy that you loved this. :)
this poem of yours is very good. i like how each stanza was spaced to allow the build up of emotion from on line to the other. i can relate to having to say good bye to people such as my mother, and my friends in my sophmore year of high school when they all ended up moving away and ironically i moved away the year after. i still talk to them but its not the same as when we all just used to hang out. overall i think this poem is very good and that its not to long not to short and relays the feelings your feeling in a medium length poem without it seeming like their should be more.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thanks a lot, Gregory! I'm glad that you liked this poem and your review is very appreciated. Thanks.. read moreThanks a lot, Gregory! I'm glad that you liked this poem and your review is very appreciated. Thanks for the kind words. That is true, it will never be the same again, and even though you still communicate, the feeling just changed, unlike when you were always together. :)
I liked the poem. I liked the way you set-up the poem leading to strong ending. I like the use of the one word and how you defined the word. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
The magic of a moment suspended in time where reality can't tarnish it's memory. I especially liked the imagery of 'promises borne from the blue stars above'
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thanks a lot for reading! I'm glad that you like it. Your words will be a big encouragement for me :.. read moreThanks a lot for reading! I'm glad that you like it. Your words will be a big encouragement for me :)
Beautifully expressed poem. Choice of words are amazing. Captures the readers attention. Warm and inviting. Each stanza represents itself. Well written. Keep up the good work.
Posted 8 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
8 Years Ago
Thanks a lot, Celie Rose. I'm very happy for the praises that you've given. Your time spent to read .. read moreThanks a lot, Celie Rose. I'm very happy for the praises that you've given. Your time spent to read this inspires me a lot. Thanks a lot! :)
You've got an arsenal of beautiful words...and you sure have no qualms about firing..Bravo!!!
"Sayonara"...what does it mean? I'm guessing something to do with goodbye."GOODBYE"_the saddest word of them all...
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
Aw, yeah! That is so true >_< And it's the saddest word in this poem.
Your words flatter me .. read moreAw, yeah! That is so true >_< And it's the saddest word in this poem.
Your words flatter me to no end that I might suffer a serious hydrocephalus(okay, I think I'm exaggerating) Anyway, thanks a lot. Your words encourage me to go on writing. Thanks a lot for reading! I totally appreciate it. :)
8 Years Ago
The pleasure was all mine.
Now care to expantiate on HYDROCEPHALUS? It got my head spinning i.. read moreThe pleasure was all mine.
Now care to expantiate on HYDROCEPHALUS? It got my head spinning in circles.
haha, it's a condition wherein a kid's head enlarges due to the accumulation of fluid. Nah, it's jus.. read morehaha, it's a condition wherein a kid's head enlarges due to the accumulation of fluid. Nah, it's just a joke. haha, sorry to make your head spin.
Beautiful poem. It made me very cozy and my heart almost melted :) Suggesting works really well in this poem and tells more than saying outright possibly could. Thanks for sharing!
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
You're very welcome, Archos! And i'm glad that you like this poem! I'm glad that this made you cozy .. read moreYou're very welcome, Archos! And i'm glad that you like this poem! I'm glad that this made you cozy and your heart warmed up. Thanks again. :)
Somehow, it seems I can't keep up with the multiple reviews that gradually increase each day. I'll try to make it a point to read your work.
Meanwhile, I am currently revising some of my old works.. more..