Longing

What are you thinking?

Look into the distance

And there flashes into one's mind

A fleeting memory

A sudden rush of melancholia...

One cannot name 

How the world seemed to glow;

When the heart quietly prays

Of that long-lost song...

Lips purse

As the songs pass by;

The heart cannot hold on

For so long, so short...

Upwards, to the sky

Infinite and blue;

One's eyes seek

What one has always been asking...

-TheMalady

Author's Note

Hullo! Want to share some thoughts? Any feedback's are always welcome! :)

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

This is a good poem. I enjoy the lightness in its tone, yet it portrays feelings that go beyond the soft edges of the piece. Although, I feel as though something's missing from this. I can't exactly think of what it is, but it seems to be lacking in translation. But, as it is, it's a marvelous piece. Good work.

[TheMalady]

Hi! Thanks a lot for the time in reviewing this piece. I'm glad you find this good. :)

[Tiffany K Charles]

I think you are a very well put writer.... I write poetry but I really don't care to much for the rhythm schemes of them though..... Maybe I should educate myself....... You motivate me to become that much more of a greater poet....

[TheMalady]

Oh my... Please don't flatter me. I am not really into tech writing. And I admire the depth of your writings. I am also learning from you, however, I'm glad that I have this effect in you. You also motivate me to write more. Thanks a lot! :)

[Tiffany K Charles]

no problem.... this is what writers do..... inspire

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot! You are so true! :)

[Celie Rose]

Such a beautiful poem. A longing heart. "What one has always been asking..." Nicely written. Keep up the good work.

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much Celie! I really appreciate your review, this is truly motivating! :)

[Southern_Writes]

This is so beautiful Mal, truly leaves ones mind reeling in its loveliness.

[TheMalady]

Gosh... Thanks a lot for the review. I was listening to the song, "You Are My Hiding Place" and thought of writing this down. Though, they don't complement with each other. Thanks a lot again! :) Truly appreciate it from the bottom of my heart! :)

[Southern_Writes]

I will have to look that song up then.

[McBear]

Very beautiful poem about longing for something. Just one little critique :)

Where you wrote

"Look into the distance
And there flashes into one's mind
A fleeting memory
A sudden rush of melancholia..."

I don't know if it is just me, but it seems like you are saying "there" flashes into someones mind, if that makes sense. Maybe word it a little differently so that it will show that you are referring to "melancholia".

[TheMalady]

Well, I guess you could put it that way. Actually, I was referring to the heart. Sorry for being ambiguous, however, I really appreciate you for pointing this out! You really have keen eyes! :) Thanks for the review! :)