Deluge

I made this out of reverie to my current book, The Time Traveler. This piece holds a meaning - a hidden message, to my characters.

Pray through the great halls where thy Gods and Goddesses dwell,

''Till Venus ascends the white stairs; before thy black capes fill.

'Of thy satires and symphonies drifting along Mt. Olympus,

'May thy eyes and lips speak of thy commoners' bleats.'

'Thy Sun-God blazes hither, its fire burning,

'Though Justice didst thy venture, desecrating,

'For, hullo! Thou Zealots, with thy fists and lips,

'Feast on vines and wines - curtains o'er thy eyes.'

'At last! Thy dawn shall cast thy away!'

'Scavengers, bow thy head! For God-Light shall play!'

'Vulture, soar up! Curse, thy dark path!

'Conquer! Suffer! Taste thy gavel of wrath!

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Author's Note

I just thought of writing something old. This is an experiment. I am curious of your thoughts regarding this one. :)

Reviews

[jesserose99]

this seems a very difficult sort of poem to attack. a very strong command of language is clearly necessary, a gift that I myself do not have. I do love poetry, but could not use wording that is so...I don't know how to put it other then mythical in feel. I would love to say I was entirely clear on the whole thing, but I got a little confused. was the sun god giving justice to the night and telling it to feast on wine, so his light could shine in the morn? do tell me if I am off base, because the words were so beautiful, I want to make sure I haven't misconstrued anything.

well written, I really enjoyed this epic piece.

[TheMalady]

Yes, that's correct. This is actually a poem I've written to attack some bad people, so this is just an experimental piece. Justice here was asked through the vulture symbolizing Pluto, the God of War.

This piece is a threat to people who abused much of their power. And they failed to listen to the please of others so, this piece was made. This is actually a part of my story, The Time Traveler. Anyway, thanks for reading! I also did research to construct this one. Thanks for reading! :)

[jesserose99]

oh, well I have to read time traveler some time, as I did enjoy the mood of this. thank you for telling me, that does open up the meaning for sure. very kind of you. abuse of power, will get you nowhere. ;)

[TheMalady]

You're right. Well, I am not yet ready with the Time Traveler story. I am planning of rewriting the whole story, especially the characters. But, I am looking forward for your review! Thanks for stopping by! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the poem. Filled with strength and energy. You left visions and thoughts for the reader. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much for the review! I really appreciate the time you took for this one. Thanks a lot! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot! Your time for reading this is just awesome! :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Very powerfully done. keep experimenting.

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much! Your review will keep me fired up in writing. :)