Bitter Heart

Do they not see? Or are they acting dumb?

I cannot be tamed with a simple 'sorry' that they habitually utter. Nor the gesture of a smile, a ghostly leer behind. However, my sensations are sharp - as keen as the razor blade. Yes, life had taught me the ropes to see eye to eye. Are there any good reasons to turn back from the world? When you have been bestowed with so much beatific gifts upon your feet?

My mind is bogged of too many things. I cannot deny, how my spirit shivers of my life's plight. Cockeyed as I may be, though I am hapless - like a lone cloud just drifting by.

Author's Note

This is all bout the bitter angst and pangs of Life. Anything. A heart grieves over it because it is unsatiated of life's standards. Hopes crushed and broken dreams. All of it. Or even a love lost in the sea of deception.

Reviews

[BThomvanWart]

Hey Malady! Just checking out some of your other work~! :)

First, I like the format of this. It reminds me of a typewriter. I think it's the font! But, that's still totally rad!
Furthermore, I like the fact that it seems like it's written from the perspective of the heart, not of the person. That's totally unique! And you capture bitterness very well in this! Not only with your literary voice, but with the word choices. I think, if this was given to me without the title, I would probably pick out bitterness as the tonal quality of the piece. Very nice write!

I also wanted to add that I love the line "Nor the gesture of a smile, a ghostly leer behind." So eerie!

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot for reading! I just had that inspiration that's why I wrote this. :) Thanks again for reading! Your feedback is greatly appreciated! :)

[maria ( rose)]

Impressive and interesting write ! Thanks for sharing, I Like this one :))
maia

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot! I am very happy that you like it! Your feedback is truly appreciated! :)

[maria ( rose)]

you're very welcome!! just glad I have some time today to review,looking forward to reading more :)

[TheMalady]

Ow geez... We're exactly the same! I hope to learn from reading in here! It is really refreshing and relaxing, right! :D

[maria ( rose)]

yes :D ............................. so happy to meet you!!!!! :)

[TheMalady]

Nice to meet you as well! :) I am new and I do want to know a lot of people here! It's really nice to have someone like you in this vast and strange world! :)

[maria ( rose)]

:) awww how sweet of you! Welcome & you will meet a lot of great people on this site I can guarantee that :)

[TheMalady]

Thank you so much! I had a nice sleep! :)

[Kent Clark]

Very intriguing story. I liked it.

[TheMalady]

Thank you very much for liking it! :)

[V]

I like the tone of it, your choice of words. You wanted it to be bitter, so you made it. I think, this is kind of blog/essay style. Just a strain of thoughts written down. Interesting read.

[TheMalady]

Thanks a lot, mimithecat! I'll keep that in mind! :)