Secrets

Screaming     emits from the Tv set in the living room playing an old horror movie.

In                  the kitchen my mom stands quietly as

Pain,             trickles from her eyes, glancing down, my father

Pass               my mother and glides towards me

The               stench of booze emits from his breath, crouching next to me.

Voices           are heard from the neighbors at the door in raised suspension of our family.

In                  the other room you can hear my little brother whimper himself to sleep and

My                 emotions mix inside of me as he grabs me by the hair on my

Head.            Forcing me to calm then bother the innocent people that awaits outside.

Author's Note

practicing poems

Reviews

[Emily]

Great poem!
Well done!!
Keep it up!

[Not here]

love horror movies :) great job on this

[Emma]

I really like how you arranged this and I must say, your writing almost brought goosebumps to my skin.
It was well written, good job.

[Angelique]

Love the layout of this poem, very impressive and very dark as well. Great writing

[HippieSoulPunx]

Love the layout/structure, two poems in one, which goes nicely with the title. Very dark poem, quite a sense of unease and suspense built up with these words. Nicely done :)

[MadalaJose]

Enjoyed this poem. The style is impressive, and your use of language is amazing. nice work

[dan]

I forgot to tell you, but I'm saving this piece in my library. Thought your would like to know. Great write! take care...dan

[dan]

I like how you have a message using the first words in lines to spell it down the left. (It's probably got a name but I'm not fluent in poetic structure). You then use them in cohesive togetherness building your presentation. Just to look at this poem on my screen is an excellent treat, then the poem is read and all the pent up emotion contained within is arranges so wonderfully. I get few read requests in which a friend asks me to review a piece, and they were very good but yours is a masterpiece. You should be very proud of this piece of art. take care...dan

[King Kutlo]

Quiet the Poet I see, you have a wide range of writing skills. . .it is impressive.

[Aphy!]

Very dark and mysterious. Emotion is very chilling. Really enjoyed reading and review this piece. Keep writing hey. Looks really good