False Hero

They pull us into the dark abyss down under
In a chilling chasm feel the warmth that emanates from me
Hear the roaring rush of blackened water flowing free
The ground that can't be seen trembles. Can you sense the thunder?

 

I detect their voices through the dampened walls
I'm not aware of the enigma their discussions hold
Maybe they are devising a plan of which we cannot be told
Echoes of untold tortures reverbating through the halls

 

I turn to console you but of me you want no part
I'm not the malevolent person who forced you to be here
You continuously try to be the hero, but it's beginning to show clear
You only crave recognition and not to be the savior of my heart

 

So we'll slowly rot together in this atrocious cell
You with an innocent damsel who trusted you obliviously
Myself with an egotistical boy who tears me down continuously
We will slip into everlasting blackness at the sound of the bell

 

I slide my hands weakly across the saturated impediment
The secrets of my captors I will never comprehend
Into the dust my grey, dehydrated skin will perfectly blend
The ceasing of a hardened heart and a smile so benevolent

Reviews

[Pritesh]

Great poem with excellent rhyme!keep writing!

[Owlgirl]

Wow! Great poem, it has a great flow and rhyme scheme! Your word choice is amazing, as are the descriptions in the poem. Emotion seems to glide off the page and the atmosphere simply changes with the poem. Amazing!!!

[Kes]

In case you hadn't noticed, I like big words, and this poem is heaving with them. I love it. :) The forth stanza is so powerful. It's almost like it's some kind of normality in a completely abnormal situation. Nasty normality, but normality nonetheless. The last line is particularly amazing too.
Great work!
K

[words a la carte]

I love your rhyme schemes. The words never feel forced in to fit the scheme. A small note on the 3rd line of the 3rd stanza continuously is mis-spelled.