When I Die

When I draw in my last living breath

Lay me down in the field where the roses grow

Beside the crystal clear water that peacefully flows

Fold my ivory colored hands over my motionless chest

 

Place a blood red rose between my cold, blue fingers

Make sure my weathered lace gown fits just right

And that there are no creases, folds, or wrinkles in sight

In the crisp morning air my silvery, soft-spoken voice will linger

 

Make sure that everyone is silent, and the timing is just so

I want the sun to be setting as you reluctantly abandon my still body

I want your final goodbyes to be unique so no one may copy

Please fulfill my wishes for this is the way I want to go

 

Also, please don't shed a tear on that deceitful day

For I am merely closing my tired eyes and going to sleep

You shouldn't be mournful just because my young heart ceases to beat

I want you to be joyful for I will no longer feel the pain

 

So  now that the sky has turned shades of oranges and pinks

Keep in your mind that this is the last thing I want to see

I beg for you to make and keep this most important promise to me

And in the glorious river is where I want my peaceful corpse to sink

 

Author's Note

I've been seeing a lot of people writing poems inspired by songs, so I decided to do my own. This one is inspired by the song If I Die Young by The Band Perry

Reviews

[SeihouThePandaHero]

very touching and very descriptive!!!!!

[Chrishauna Thompson]

This poem has me lost for words..! I love it to the point I read it 3 times this is very touching.>! Excellent job.!

[Beka Perry]

I love it. It sounds peaceful and you can really grasp the meaning of the title. I really love it!

[None]

This sounded just like the song. Interesting. Definitely a great exercise in emulating voice. Odd isn't it? How coping rhythm and lines from something already written almost creates something oddly different and yet the same, like a twin.

[BLBrown]

And I just noticed that you are 13!! How do you write something like this at 13? You are amazing!! Keep writing!!

[BLBrown]

Really very touching an emotional. You write with determination and great flow of words. This is such a difficult topic, not many can write about this. It reminds me of a similar poem I wrote which you might appreciate, from a bit of a different perspective if you're interested:

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/bbrown/964947/

Thanks for sharing such a beautiful and sad song with us!

- Barbara

[Wild Willow Blue]

That is a fabulous song, and this is a very well written poem inspired by that song. It made me tear up just a bit. Well done.

[just is]

WOW, This is pretty darn good, I loved the imagery myself.
Awesome writing here.

[TC Dunn]

powerful imagery. I love the Band Perry and can see how their song inspired you here. Loved it. Great job.

[Kelsy]

Nicely expressed and vivid.Good job!