Tricky Thinking

You can't trick me into thinking

Thinking that you are real

You can't push me into believing

Believing that is how I should feel

You can't make me smile

Smile when I'm all alone

You can't make me love

Love those who left me without a home

You can't make me turn away

Away from all my dark feelings

You can't mislead me into accepting

Accepting that you will help me with my healing

You can't deceive me into admitting

Admitting that you are my only resort

You can't swindle me into understanding

Understanding that life isn't all that short

You think that you can misinform

Misinform us that you are easy access

You are the secret evil that they

Rightfully call Gullible Happiness.

Author's Note

Not my best, but I wanted to write something.

Reviews

[None]

I like the relay race this piece enacts. It has a surge to it that fuels the rant. Great write. I think this was very well done, and extremely clear.

[Maria.F.T]

Inspirational write ! (y)

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Your final line gave me what I needed to really understand what you are saying here. You have done that well. I like the repetition of the last word of some lines, because it seems to move the words along and creates an interesting tempo. Sometimes, the repetition of just one line many times through a poem can slow the reader down, but you seem to have instinctually felt the tempo you were creating. If you want to work with this poem, you could tighten your words up a bit - such as in the 4th line using the contraction "that's" instead of "that is" and so forth throughout...just my opinion, but I think if you do that you will see how the flow picks up. Really this is a very good write.

[Marina]

You say "not my best" but actually to churn this out and I'm guessing kind of quickly too is clearly talent, it is has put a knowing smile on my face as I can relate. Nice one.

[earthtohannah]

I like the concept of this and the rhyming flows so easily! I wouldn't say this isn't one of your best! :)

[Kelsy]

You can't make me believe
Believe that this is not your best
You can't make me not love
Not love this piece.
Good job and real nice

[DeliriousCerises]

Wonderful. I love the rhyming, which can easily be over done, but with the repetition you made it flow very smoothly and naturally. Overall I just really like the style of this poem. And I agree with Mackenzie the concept is pretty good too.

[that-little-green-monst..]

I like the message and love the last line. I love how you wrote this one. Great job!

[Mackenzie Brooke]

i like the rythm and i like the concept behind it