Words That You Whisper

The words that you whisper

Chill me to the bone

They tell of a story with a killer

Of dreams, not lives

Oh, the words that you whisper

Cut through me like knives

They tell the story of a person

Who only cared about himself

Not the dreams he crushed of anyone else

"Let it go," you demand

To no one but you

He thought he had to be in command

Of not just his own life, but yours too

He wasn't a father

Not even close

He said you were a bother

So why did he keep you as his rose

Whose petals he would pluck

And throw to the floor

Stomp them until they were stuck

And could be nothing more

Maybe deep down he really did care

Maybe he was just bitter

Either way, there are so many scary things that you share

In the words that you whisper,

Keep whispering.

Reviews

[Admiral Kirk]

This is a very chilling piece... I definitely enjoyed reading this. It is extremely well written, and I feel all the emotions you put into this poem. Excellent work.

[Tony Williams]

Very inspiring. (also far beyond a 13 year old's level)
Nitpick: 'Hisself' in line 8 should be himself, but I assume this is a typo.
very nice flow to "They tell of a story with a killer/ Of dreams, not lives/ Oh, the words that you whisper." Expertly done!

So why did he keep you as his rose
Whose petals he would pluck
And throw to the floor
Stomp them until they were stuck

WOW i so loved these words, i can feel this write,
Amazing write.

[Distant horizons]

There is indeed. Nicely done. great end.

[Sophie]

Beautiful, I loved this :)