An Ocean Of Love

An Ocean Of Love

A Poem by TheLostMind
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Well?..

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Deafening silence.. Fills her mind..
Dreams and illusions... Shadow reality..

Beautiful bird.. Wounded heart...
Yearning.. To fly again...

An ocean of love... Found and lost..
Thirsty.. For just one drop..

Wings clipped.. Legs chained..
And a home that lies.. Oceans apart...

Fighting against Time.. Against life..
While they tease and test.. Her heart..

Chilling winds...  Destructive storms..
She braves them all.. With a smile...


Mad hope... Blinds my eyes...
As I try in vain.. With my soul and heart...

My delusional mind.. Walks the path..
Still denying.. That it's lost...

Confused, it wanders.. Embracing insanity..
As I walk a fine line... Between reality and sanity...

© 2015 TheLostMind


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TheLostMind
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This is beautiful. The only thing I would suggest is change "it's" in line 16, to "it is". This just makes the poem flow a little nicer for me :) This is such a sad poem but so wonderfully written that I can't help but like it. If this is about you, I'm sorry that you have to feel this way. It gets easier! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you River :)I am glad you liked it.. I appreciate your kind words and concern.. Thanks again :.. read more
kaila

9 Years Ago

"it's" line 16 seemed to flow fine to me. Neat poem. Enjoyable read. Thank you.
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)



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ahh that illusive hope for love and acceptance

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by Wordman :)
 wordman

9 Years Ago

you are welcome
This is beautiful. The only thing I would suggest is change "it's" in line 16, to "it is". This just makes the poem flow a little nicer for me :) This is such a sad poem but so wonderfully written that I can't help but like it. If this is about you, I'm sorry that you have to feel this way. It gets easier! :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you River :)I am glad you liked it.. I appreciate your kind words and concern.. Thanks again :.. read more
kaila

9 Years Ago

"it's" line 16 seemed to flow fine to me. Neat poem. Enjoyable read. Thank you.
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
Thirsty for just one drop. We all search for love, some have it given to them, others have to work for it. Valentine

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

"others have to work for it." - I don't think we can ever work for it. If you work for it, then it i.. read more
Valentine

9 Years Ago

It takes work to be kind, true, faithful, trusting, honest about everything etc. I lost my husband .. read more
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

You are right. I am sorry about your loss. B blessed :)
I got divorced after15 years and boy does this piece really sound familiar!
The last stanza literally was yelling at me:( Great write! Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Am sorry to hear that.. But what must happen will happen right?. Thanks for stopping by (not sure if.. read more
My review? Absolutely brilliant, the structure is totally new, the split of a line into two creates a double poem on each verse and the strength of this lies in its quality of a dream, the hope's and dreams herein are summed up in the final line 'Between reality and sanity' a perfect finale' to a perfect poem, thank you for this :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you Richard.. Your insightful reviews always bring a smile on my face. Can't thank you enough... read more
What a very unique delivery. How true it is, a fine line indeed.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank You :)
Interesting two perspectives. One is a fiery girl who braves the world, no matter what. Her smile is her secret weapon. She's been released at last from the woes of life. One is a melancholy man. He has lost this girl. She's still in his heart so presently that he doesn't know what is real and what is not.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

You can't lose something that was never yours. Actually, the second part is about a person who is .. read more
When you lose someone that you dearly loved its actually like a living hell. And with no one to share its easy to lose one's sanity.
I like the way you executed the whole poem in two different pieces.. Both connected together with a single cause of pain.. Bravo..

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you nazia for your lovely review :). The person could be anyone you care about.. And when thin.. read more
nazia

9 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
Yeah and when you are helpless and unable to do anything that's really sad... read more
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Right :).....

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