An Ocean Of Love

Well?..

Deafening silence.. Fills her mind..

Dreams and illusions... Shadow reality..

Beautiful bird.. Wounded heart...

Yearning.. To fly again...

An ocean of love... Found and lost..

Thirsty.. For just one drop..

Wings clipped.. Legs chained..

And a home that lies.. Oceans apart...

Fighting against Time.. Against life..

While they tease and test.. Her heart..

Chilling winds...  Destructive storms..

She braves them all.. With a smile...

Mad hope... Blinds my eyes...

As I try in vain.. With my soul and heart...

My delusional mind.. Walks the path..

Still denying.. That it's lost...

Confused, it wanders.. Embracing insanity..

As I walk a fine line... Between reality and sanity...

Author's Note

Please review and comment.. Thank You :)

Reviews

[RiverRei]

This is beautiful. The only thing I would suggest is change "it's" in line 16, to "it is". This just makes the poem flow a little nicer for me :) This is such a sad poem but so wonderfully written that I can't help but like it. If this is about you, I'm sorry that you have to feel this way. It gets easier! :)

[TheLostMind]

Thank you River :)I am glad you liked it.. I appreciate your kind words and concern.. Thanks again :)

[kaila]

"it's" line 16 seemed to flow fine to me. Neat poem. Enjoyable read. Thank you.

[TheLostMind]

Thank you :)

[Jimmy Yetts]

There are times when insanity is the more comfortable choice.

"Wings clipped..Legs chained..
And a home that lies..Oceans apart..."

Wow!--couldn't portray helpless and hopeless any more concisely, any more poetically.
Dynamite write, TLM!

[Harshita]

This is a beautiful poem. Please review my works too.

[ROXANE DORSEY]

very nice i like your talent thanks for sharing.

[Bacchus]

very interesting
i like the duality here
it's almost as if this bird braved
an ocean that with lands too far apart

[kitty]

Relate-able piece. As I am new on here I am lost as to how to respond to reviews. Wrote on to you on your review of 'From a Distance'. Thanking U for the review. "An Ocean of Love" is relate able to me. I am in favor of any 'Romantic' work.

[AYVID N]

Beautiful bird.. Wounded heart...
Yearning.. To fly again...

An ocean of love... Found and lost..
Thirsty.. For just one drop..

I appreciate so much the sheer poetry. An ocean of love found and lost while I thirst for just a drop. How ironic and sad.

[TheLostMind]

Thanks for stopping by. Yes, love can sometimes be beautiful but most times it leaves the leaves the person in melancholy.

[AYVID N]

You are welcome...

[B]

Oh this is a very soft and light poem
i enjoy your flow and your choice of wording

really calming

[TheLostMind]

Thank You!

[Healing Star]

Our Love is Water
It runs through our Veins

I am Thirsty
And it's your Water I Crave

I feel Troubled
Like a Storm on the Sea

Only gets Worse With
My Minds Curiosity

I Sit and Tremble
Lost to my Fear

I Stumble
ON a Hand in the Street

I gain Hope
As I feel you draw Near

In the Darkness
It's there Myself I Meet

My Indecision
I always thought my Friend

Thought My Answers
Would always come from my Light

But I Friend Darkness
When I thought it was the End

Clouds of Confusion
Like the Dust in the Storm

Falls Out
Like weight in a Dream

I Learned

Our Love is Water
It runs through our Veins


I am Thirsty
And it's your Water I Crave

Beautiful Poem Hope - and I just wrote these lines - Your energy wrote these, and Nahko Bears harmony, I was hearing him sing this to his song ... Dear Brother - Blessings - I LOVED IT , you put a Spark in my Heart and it brought this outta me.

Have a BEautiful Day, and however you do it, don't forget to Pray, and at night when you Lay= and a thought of me or what I said, comes to you. please, please, please SMILE.

[TheLostMind]

This is outstanding. Thank you :)

[Healing Star]

I finished it - check it out. http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/gfrisk21/1847133/

[Healing Star]

looks like the link did not work - it's called Love Thirst I just finished it up, thanks for the Energy - it's written in your energy and Nahko Bear's songs Melody. Keep on Hopin' in the Good Things Coming, Coming, Coming

[Papaya]

She is a strong and resilient force, I like the struggle to stay on course.
So true to life.

[TheLostMind]

Yes indeed. . Thanks for stopping by :)

[Lorry]

I think you capture perfectly the feeling in words, of that final and ultimate pain that is the heaviness of the heart that has been given and discarded. The hollowness of all sound, sights and pleasure, distorted by the bitter taste of bile that is unceasing and remorseless in breaking us further and tearing any and all dreams apart, filling our world with a haze that distorts even reality. Wonderfully captured.

[TheLostMind]

Again, another wonderful review. Thanks for stopping by :)