Life Is Never Fair

Life Is Never Fair

A Poem by TheLostMind
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Walking to the funeral of a person you loved...

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I walk along that crowded lane.
Wondering how long I'll feel the pain.
My broken heart keeps banging against my chest.
Is it time for it to rest??.
Even though I try to leave them behind...
Those memories of her still haunt my mind...
Pale and motionless,she stings my eyes....
She drives me insane, she makes me realize..
Life is never fair, my friend...
Coz all good things are destined to end.....
I thought that she was the one for me...
God wasn't fair in setting her free...
The void left by her can never be filled...
The funeral was hers', but it was my soul that was killed...
Now, against my weak heart I fight...
Wondering what's wrong and what's right...
Your consoling words won't suffice..
They inebriate my brain, they make me realize..
Life is never fair my friend...
Coz all good things are destined to end...
I think of her night and day...
Wondering why God took her away ..
I try to keep my spirit alive...
Its been ripped, left to die...
I feel her pain, I hear her cries..
Shattered, broken, slowly I realize..
Life is always fair, my friend...
Like all broken things, even this will mend..

© 2014 TheLostMind


Author's Note

TheLostMind
Replaced - "Like all ruined things, even this life will end.... " with "Like all broken things, even this will mend..".. There is always hope :) ..

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The void left by her can never be filled...
The funeral was hers', but it was my soul that was killed...

I wish I had written this line.

Life is always fair, my friend...
Like all broken things, even this will mend..


The positivity in the face of the melancholy leaves a good feel.

Posted 7 Years Ago


TheLostMind

7 Years Ago

Thanks again. Yes, there is always hope :). Thanks for stopping by
AYVID N

7 Years Ago

You are welcome.
this is the best piece i have read in a while. I'm inspired, thank you..

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is beautiful, so dark but graceful and touching. Also, I must say I'm very impressed with how good you are at writing poetry with rhyme - it's certainly not as easy as it looks, but you make it look effortless!

Posted 8 Years Ago


TheLostMind

8 Years Ago

Thanks for stopping by. I really appreciate it. I am glad you liked it :)
This was heart touching.
Beautiful write :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank You :)
You have said " life is always fair'' in the second last line...is that deliberate or a mistake?

I really liked it until that line, it broke my flow. Its heart wrenchingly sweet. Reflects on the pain of loss realistically.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

To be honest, I am glad you questioned me:P.. Questioning people on their writes makes the writer fe.. read more
Isabel25

9 Years Ago

Well yeah, it just distorted my flow of thoughts..that's why asked. But you validated very well :D
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Not my area of expertise.. Donno how the "validation part" worked.. Anyways, I am glad it did.. Tha .. read more
a poem to rip the reader's heart out.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob. I appreciate your kind words :)
Another beautiful piece. Life is fair and for that always have hope! I loved it.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank You :)
Filled with such an emotional depth.. the cry of the heart.. the pain of loss and trying to understand the shadows that fall over us. And here, even in this pain, you find a way to turn the thoughts to life.. to hope...

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you :)
I am glad you changed the last lines. It is more hopeful indeed. Not to say the other lines weren't fitting, but we all need a little bit of hope to cling on and heal is overtime. It is a beautiful poem of love, loss, grief, heartbreak, and eventual healing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you Nida :). You are right there is always hope. Time wilheal our wounds but the scars will l.. read more
A powerful poem with great sincerity. I'm glad I visited...:).............

Posted 9 Years Ago


TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Thank you Sami. It is really an honour to have an exceptional writer like you reviewing my work. Tha.. read more
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

Wow. Thank you kindly. You are welcome...:).....

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