Memories

This is how I felt when I left college after graduation.

That empty classroom makes me think..
Four years have passed within a blink...

Only yesterday it seems that we were here...
Laughing around with friends so dear...

Suddenly my life has come to a stall...
And I wonder, is this all? ? 

This feeling of emptiness sinks into my heart..
A large chunk of my life's been ripped apart...

From within this abyss of loneliness, emanates a tear..
Shed for the person, who seemed so near...

How can I believe? , how can I forget? 
All those unsaid things fill me with regret..

Amongst those tears, amidst the pain..
(I wonder) will my life ever be the same? ? ? ..

I wish this was a dream, I wish this wasnt real...
How can I tell you, how I really feel...

Years later, all that will be left behind..
Is a bunch of memories refusing to let go of my mind...

Yet somehow, someday our paths will cross...
And we will wish that moment would never pass...

Author's Note

This is how I felt when I left college after graduation.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

overall this is a really good write.. It is meaningful and something that a lot can relate to.. some of the questions asked are ones that we have all wondered... I will say some of the rhymes felt forced or predictable and flow a little "off" in a few places.. also (wasn't) is missing an apostrophe and "how can I tell you how I really feel?. is missing the question mark...

"This feeling of emptiness sinks into my heart..
A large chunk of my life's been ripped apart..."

"Amongst those tears, amidst the pain..
(I wonder) will my life ever be the same? ? ? .".... those four lines are so powerful and expressive... they reach out and grab the reader and allow us to feel your pain and confusion... the fear... the longing for what once was... nice job:)

[TheLostMind]

April, I truly appreciate your time and effort. Thanks for reviewing the poem. Yes, I agree some of the rhymes seem forced (and yes, I am trying to improve).

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome.. it was my pleasure... :)

[Healing Star]

Very nice poem, life is a hike, it's filled with uphills and downhills.
But the best hike of all is the one up the Mountain within ourselves.
You will leave all these feelings of regret behind once you have climbed your personal Mountain.
When we are young it is such a struggle. Things flying in and out of our lives, people who are ready
hanging with those who just are not. All things that happen are not happening to us but for us, it is
all to bring us along, timing is everything, and we need to prepare ourselves for when the moment
is right, because it will be. It's a long road, prepare yourself for a life of constant change.

[TheLostMind]

I kinda agree "life is a hike, it's filled with uphills and downhills.
But the best hike of all is the one up the Mountain within ourselves.". But I am not quite sure about "leaving behind all these feelings of egret behind"'... Memories, no matter how much we try, they linger around.. the haunt us until the end of time.. :)

[Healing Star]

In the end, all that we have is what we have given away. Before one can receive he must let go, to make room for the abundance that awaits him.

[Tasfia Islam]

this poem is the best poem i ever read.....its so damn awesome,,,, loved it seriously, ......u can be a great poet..... im sure of it....i have so much to learn from u.....

[TheLostMind]

Thanks Annabelle. "best poem you've ever read"? thank you..(could there be a greater compliment? :P) .. I think you must have a look at "Rudyard Kipling's" poem "If".. Well, I am trying to do better.. There is always something to learn from the poets / writers on WritersCafe. I am glad you liked this poem :)

[Tasfia Islam]

ummmm....i dnt knw....but its true......i really loved it....already read it 5 times....great job!!!

[Aparna]

I am quite near to graduating right now, and I can exactly feel the poem myself! Nice work :)

[TheLostMind]

Thanks Aparna :).

[Rene Salinas]

Intimate feelings been shared here. I really felt the effort of you trying to make the writing compact and contained as if every word had been carefully selected to fit format. The other side of that feeling of neatness was that maybe the format could, and I say only could also be an impediment to free that feeling more, by a different sort of format. Just a thought though .... . As for the narrative it took me back the weight of feeling. It seems your feelings for her were not reciprocated and well all and all not such an endearing experience. As it broughts tears, and pain to what is supposed to be a light full of future instances moment, revelling in possibilities.

Hopefully, one day the memories will achieve closure.

Thankyou

[TheLostMind]

Yes. The poem had to be reviewed and changed multiple times to make it better. The problem with memories is - they don't achieve closure. They will haunt us until the end of time. Thanks for the review :)

[Jonas]

You're writing!
Yes, I was waiting.
I love your stuff.

[TheLostMind]

Thanks :).

[Jonas]

No problem at all.