Memories

This is how I felt when I left college after graduation.

That empty classroom makes me think..
Four years have passed within a blink...

Only yesterday it seems that we were here...
Laughing around with friends so dear...

Suddenly my life has come to a stall...
And I wonder, is this all? ? 

This feeling of emptiness sinks into my heart..
A large chunk of my life's been ripped apart...

From within this abyss of loneliness, emanates a tear..
Shed for the person, who seemed so near...

How can I believe? , how can I forget? 
All those unsaid things fill me with regret..

Amongst those tears, amidst the pain..
(I wonder) will my life ever be the same? ? ? ..

I wish this was a dream, I wish this wasnt real...
How can I tell you, how I really feel...

Years later, all that will be left behind..
Is a bunch of memories refusing to let go of my mind...

Yet somehow, someday our paths will cross...
And we will wish that moment would never pass...

Author's Note

This is how I felt when I left college after graduation.

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

overall this is a really good write.. It is meaningful and something that a lot can relate to.. some of the questions asked are ones that we have all wondered... I will say some of the rhymes felt forced or predictable and flow a little "off" in a few places.. also (wasn't) is missing an apostrophe and "how can I tell you how I really feel?. is missing the question mark...

"This feeling of emptiness sinks into my heart..
A large chunk of my life's been ripped apart..."

"Amongst those tears, amidst the pain..
(I wonder) will my life ever be the same? ? ? .".... those four lines are so powerful and expressive... they reach out and grab the reader and allow us to feel your pain and confusion... the fear... the longing for what once was... nice job:)

[TheLostMind]

April, I truly appreciate your time and effort. Thanks for reviewing the poem. Yes, I agree some of the rhymes seem forced (and yes, I am trying to improve).

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome.. it was my pleasure... :)

[Silmara McGarry]

Another really good one! Very well written and with great rhymes. Wonderful work!

[TheLostMind]

Thank You :)

[horizon]

Wow these are the emotions which I feel still but for the school..not for college...you brought back the memories of school from your college days memories...thanks a lott..time never comes...they were the best days of my life...thanks for sharing

[TheLostMind]

Thank you for reviewing :)

[AmandaFuller]

I love this. It reminds me of how I felt graduating middle school considering I am still so young. Great work.

[Isabel25]

Hmm..Tomorrow is my last day of college. Weird how I came across this at this point of my life. We can never hold on to time. All we can do is to remember our good times well, and forget the bad instances. Memories can be a boon as well as bane. At times I wish I could forget people so that I wouldn't miss them so badly.

Its written beautifully- simple language, touching thoughts.
I hope your path crosses with that person you are yearning for :)

[TheLostMind]

"At times I wish I could forget people so that I wouldn't miss them so badly." - Couldn't agree more..
"I hope your path crosses with that person you are yearning for " - People.. not just one person :P...
Thanks for stopping by. Your kind words are much appreciated :)

[Isabel25]

You are most welcome :)

[RiverRei]

I was entranced the entire time I was reading this. It made me tear up and almost cry. I felt what you felt and can relate to an extent. I love your choice of words, I can create an image in my head of a situation where these thoughts would take place, even though you never describe a specific site. It did throw me off that you didn't use any rhyme at the last couple of lines and I'm sure it was intentional but I didn't like it lol. The flow of the piece was completely torn asunder by the last line and how it didn't rhyme. Overall, it is still a magnificent piece, though! :)

[TheLostMind]

Thank You for your review and constructive criticism. Don't cry (this poem was never meant for that :P). I am glad you liked this. Again, I appreciate the honesty in your reviews. Telling people what you feel and not what they want to hear takes a lot of courage :)

[Roshan Nair]

I liked the piece man, almost got me nostalgic about my grad years. I found great empathy in your words, the sense of leaving all that you've known and cherished all these years is tough
Great write!

[TheLostMind]

Thank you Roshan, your kidn words are much appreciated :)

[~]

How are you feeling now? Did the emptiness, and the left behind feeling dissipate? Or are you sill living in the nostalgia of the years?

[TheLostMind]

I don't live in the past. So, I will be ok. Ya. Certain things dissipate with time. .certain memories are too precious to be forgotten. I will cherish those moments. . Keeping them safe. . Keeping them with me forever. :). thank you for asking and stopping by MS.:)

[~]

Good to hear :) Still waiting for a new one TLM :):)

[TheLostMind]

Waiting for a new what? ;)

[~]

A new poem :)

[TheLostMind]

Lol why??..

[~]

and why not?

[TheLostMind]

answering a question with another question? ; )

[~]

:).............

[TheLostMind]

kinda busy now a days.. So no time for silly romantic thoughts. :(

[~]

who said it has to be romantic.

[TheLostMind]

Nobody. Ok. I have precious little time on my hands to write poems or stories. :)

[~]

LOL hahaaha :) okay, I will let you go back to work. we don't want things to get matrix-y on us because of me :)

[TheLostMind]

I just returned from office. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. Wasn't for Facebook. I would of lost most of my friend.
"Years later, all that will be left behind..
Is a bunch of memories refusing to let go of my mind..."
I told my children. Best days in your life. Is the time of education. We will work for 50 years. Enjoy time with your friends and know laughter and fun. Thank you for sharing your amazing poetry.
Coyote

[TheLostMind]

Thanks for this insightful review. You are right. The best days in our lives are the ones we spent in school / college. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I learn too late like most people and you are welcome.

[Gee]

I like what comes across in the poem but tend to agree with April in that the flow is stilted and the rhyming to forced.I'm a rhyming type, and it helps me to read a line and then try to make all others flow with a similar beat.Hope that makes sense.I'm not self promoting but "Put the world on mute and pause" is probably the best example of what I have written that explains what I have, probably,miserably tried to say.

[TheLostMind]

Yep... It makes sense.. rhymes are my thing too:).. I consider only rhyming set of lines as poems :).. will keep your advice on my mind while writing :).. Thanks for stopping by. ..

[Gee]

My pleasure

[Daydreamer]

This writing has some pretty good phrasing! Nice work🎆🎆

[TheLostMind]

Thanks Manal :)

[Daydreamer]

Welcome(your name):D