Lost

Lost

A Poem by TheLostMind
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Sometimes, when I am alone, I write such poems :)

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I hear its cry, I hear its wail..
I feel my heart, weak and frail...

I see those tears, as they fall..
Clutching my chest, I feel it all...

How I wish, she hadn't left me alone..
Pushing me into an abyss, I had never ever known..

I try to erase, those memories of the past..
Their time has come, everything's lost..

Sometimes she sneaks, into my dreams..
So cheerful and pleasant, there she seems..

Only if she promised, to leave me never..
I could lie on my bed, dreaming forever..

In memories of her, I've drowned my mind..
I find it hard, to leave the past behind..

Thus go my days, so do the nights..
Everything seems so dark, even with the lights..

As helplessness befalls my addled brain..
I close my eyes, writhing in pain..

Amidst those tears, I force a smile..
She was friend, I loved to rile...

But what's done is done, what's lost is lost..
The wound will heal, but the scars will last...

In despair and agony, I write this song..
Still wondering where, it all went wrong..

© 2014 TheLostMind


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I used to wonder too.
But the guy was a douchebag. I stopped being hard on myself.
I used to listen to this song by The Fray called Where Did I Go Wrong?
Wounds heal but the scars remain. Agreed.
But guess what? When you come across new and better people, they will act as your anti-scar cream!
My scars are going,going,gone...
Anyway....fabulous poem!
Nicely done.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

Sometimes you just want "certain" scars to stay.. Just as a remainder of some people :P. So, no. Tha.. read more
Ishita Dixit

9 Years Ago

To each his own!
TheLostMind

9 Years Ago

To each his / her own! :)



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This reminds me of Aethereal. He would spend countless hours I assume trying to find the word which would fit the perfect rhythm the perfect beat. I find it very difficult and tiresome to do so I certainly keep away from that impulse. The writing here is again so intimate and the purity of feeling is strong but the rhyme of format are so predisposed that in the words where it doesn't perfectly fit, I found myself going back and making them fit, chaning intonation and speed. But the thoughts of the relationship gone a little sour prevail.

Thankyou

Posted 10 Years Ago


TheLostMind

10 Years Ago

Thanks Rene, for your honest review :). Yes, in some places the rhymes seem forced. I am trying to i.. read more
I love the rhyming couplets. They are seamless and timeless. Awesome job!!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


TheLostMind

10 Years Ago

Thanks.. :)
I am torn on this one my friend... you do the meter and rhyme so strong on some lines and others I stumble a bit... one thing that didn't waver throughout though was the emotion... it was palpable, real, and strong... I can feel the pain, the regret, the longing, the despair... the depth of reflection in this one is pretty dang affecting... the first two lines and the last two are my absolute favorite.. for those alone, this is one of my favorites...

Posted 10 Years Ago


AprilRN1210

10 Years Ago

Quite the accomplishment to be sure:)
TheLostMind

10 Years Ago

Indeed it is :).
AprilRN1210

10 Years Ago

careful, it is all downhill from here.. :P
But what's done is done, what's lost is lost..
The wound will heal, but the scars will last...

^ I really loved this line, it goes along the lines of you can forgive but never forget, but I love the way you worded it, a more flow easy lines, and I just want to say I really enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading more!

You have a talent and put it into good use!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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TheLostMind

10 Years Ago

Thanks.. Feels good to be appreciated :P. Will keep posting..
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it s sound very strong and very deep wound. words are very truly and you give to people read strong message .

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

TheLostMind

10 Years Ago

Thanks :)..
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10 Years Ago

you very wellcome .

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