I used to wonder too.
But the guy was a douchebag. I stopped being hard on myself.
I used to listen to this song by The Fray called Where Did I Go Wrong?
Wounds heal but the scars remain. Agreed.
But guess what? When you come across new and better people, they will act as your anti-scar cream!
My scars are going,going,gone...
Anyway....fabulous poem!
Nicely done.
Posted 9 Years Ago
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9 Years Ago
Thanks Ishita for your kind words. Never heard of an "anti-scar" cream. :P
Sometimes you just want "certain" scars to stay.. Just as a remainder of some people :P. So, no. Tha.. read moreSometimes you just want "certain" scars to stay.. Just as a remainder of some people :P. So, no. Thank you.
This reminds me of Aethereal. He would spend countless hours I assume trying to find the word which would fit the perfect rhythm the perfect beat. I find it very difficult and tiresome to do so I certainly keep away from that impulse. The writing here is again so intimate and the purity of feeling is strong but the rhyme of format are so predisposed that in the words where it doesn't perfectly fit, I found myself going back and making them fit, chaning intonation and speed. But the thoughts of the relationship gone a little sour prevail.
Thankyou
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thanks Rene, for your honest review :). Yes, in some places the rhymes seem forced. I am trying to i.. read moreThanks Rene, for your honest review :). Yes, in some places the rhymes seem forced. I am trying to improve.
I am torn on this one my friend... you do the meter and rhyme so strong on some lines and others I stumble a bit... one thing that didn't waver throughout though was the emotion... it was palpable, real, and strong... I can feel the pain, the regret, the longing, the despair... the depth of reflection in this one is pretty dang affecting... the first two lines and the last two are my absolute favorite.. for those alone, this is one of my favorites...
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
Thanks April. I feel this is my best poem so far. Wrote this when I was very sad (a couple of years .. read moreThanks April. I feel this is my best poem so far. Wrote this when I was very sad (a couple of years back actually). When things don't go our way, we start cursing our fate only to realise (later) - all that happens, happens for good. :)
10 Years Ago
You're welcome... Not sure about happens for good but lessons can definitely be learned and new oppo.. read moreYou're welcome... Not sure about happens for good but lessons can definitely be learned and new opportunities opened...
10 Years Ago
If there are lessons to be learned, that means we were wrong about something / someone. So, whatever.. read moreIf there are lessons to be learned, that means we were wrong about something / someone. So, whatever happened, happened for good. :P
10 Years Ago
Ahhhh ok smarty pants... When you say it that way, I am, of course, inclined to agree :P
10 Years Ago
Ow wow. Did I just win an argument with a woman?. Suddenly my life has become more meaningful :P
But what's done is done, what's lost is lost..
The wound will heal, but the scars will last...
^ I really loved this line, it goes along the lines of you can forgive but never forget, but I love the way you worded it, a more flow easy lines, and I just want to say I really enjoyed reading your poem and look forward to reading more!
You have a talent and put it into good use!
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thanks.. Feels good to be appreciated :P. Will keep posting..
I love reading poems. I will be reviewing your poems / stories as and when I get some time. I like honest reviews, so expect my reviews to be honest. If I have reviewed your poem, I have done it becau.. more..