Lost

Sometimes, when I am alone, I write such poems :)

I hear its cry, I hear its wail..

I feel my heart, weak and frail...

I see those tears, as they fall..

Clutching my chest, I feel it all...

How I wish, she hadn't left me alone..

Pushing me into an abyss, I had never ever known..

I try to erase, those memories of the past..

Their time has come, everything's lost..

Sometimes she sneaks, into my dreams..

So cheerful and pleasant, there she seems..

Only if she promised, to leave me never..

I could lie on my bed, dreaming forever..

In memories of her, I've drowned my mind..

I find it hard, to leave the past behind..

Thus go my days, so do the nights..

Everything seems so dark, even with the lights..

As helplessness befalls my addled brain..

I close my eyes, writhing in pain..

Amidst those tears, I force a smile..

She was friend, I loved to rile...

But what's done is done, what's lost is lost..

The wound will heal, but the scars will last...

In despair and agony, I write this song..

Still wondering where, it all went wrong..

Reviews

[Ishita Dixit]

I used to wonder too.
But the guy was a douchebag. I stopped being hard on myself.
I used to listen to this song by The Fray called Where Did I Go Wrong?
Wounds heal but the scars remain. Agreed.
But guess what? When you come across new and better people, they will act as your anti-scar cream!
My scars are going,going,gone...
Anyway....fabulous poem!
Nicely done.

[TheLostMind]

Thanks Ishita for your kind words. Never heard of an "anti-scar" cream. :P

[Ishita Dixit]

Google Mederma and Nomarks then!

[TheLostMind]

Sometimes you just want "certain" scars to stay.. Just as a remainder of some people :P. So, no. Thank you.

[Ishita Dixit]

To each his own!

[TheLostMind]

To each his / her own! :)

[horizon]

Rhyming 10 on 10..feelings 110 on 100..there were so many things which I loved it is a phenomenal poetry...its like defining the ache of heart..

[RiverRei]

I like it :) very heartfelt, again I almost cried reading this. Whoever this girl is...she is missing out a great guy :) However! This doesn't have a singular rhyme scheme. You actually break up the rhyme in 'stanza' 4, and 11. I LOVE this though. I enjoyed it so much that I'm at a loss for words on what else to say for the review lol. Thank you for sharing this with me though :)

[TheLostMind]

Thanks for stopping by :). Means a lot.. Well, "Lost" and "last" aren't exactly rhyming words but aren't totally different either. :P. I am glad you liked this one. I usually concentrate on the rhyming schemes (1-3,2-4) or (1-2,3-4).. Have tried free flowing poetry lately.. Not sure whether it fits my style.. Any-which way, in the end its the content that matters :P

[RiverRei]

This is very true, the content is what's important :) I don't think it effects your writing at all, just something fun to challenge yourself with. I love writing and trying different things is always fun for me, even if it's challenging :) Send me a read request if you try a free flow piece! I would love to see how it contrasts with your talent for rhyming!

[TheLostMind]

I can't write unless I am emotionally down. I just can't.. I do have a poem - "How can I let you go" that's kind of free flowing. Thanks again :)

[Roshan Nair]

This one is precious, I really really liked the lesson you've shown us through this write. letting go to let life flow, its tough but the only way. great words and even better structure to the piece! cheers :)

[TheLostMind]

Thanks for this lovely review Roshan :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand the poem.
"Only if she promised, to leave me never..
I could lie on my bed, dreaming forever.."
Promises made and broken. Leave us wishing for things we cannot have. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. Regret and lost leave us with things to write. Good place to release memories and pain.
Coyote

[TheLostMind]

Thanks coyote :).. You are right. Regret and loss make us write such poems. The emotions will have to come out somehow :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right and you are welcome.

[Andrea Carter]

You have a real gift of expressing pain and emotions extremely well. I feel it in this poem. So many of the lines, I totally loved. Feeling that pain everyday is how some people live their life. So many can relate. Reading this brings back a time in my life where I felt ripped apart like this. But your right, the would will heal, but the scars will last..... way too true.. Well written.. :)

[TheLostMind]

Thanks for reviewing Andrea :).. I am both happy and sad (oops) that you can relate to this poem.. We all have our ups and downs in life.. The way we face them makes us who we are.. We can stay in the past, suffering forever or leave the past behind and look at the future, full of hope.. Thanks again :)

[Healing Star]

You capture your feelings very nicely in this piece.
It was many, many years ago, that I felt like you about someone.
I felt the same despair, felt I could not go on. It did take time
and it was many, many years later before I really started to work on myself.
But an experience like this really does teach us a lot, and nothing did go wrong.
It's just timing, it takes many miracles, many clock pieces to fall into place, when
a relationship really works for both and all the timing is right, both are ready.
Best advice I can give is keep your chin up, learn from it, do not even think about
turning yourself off because it hurts to much, you will love again. It may take a year,
it may take 20 but it will happen if you allow it. Prepare for it, prepare yourself,
for that next time when everything is right, you are going to look back on this time
and you will say I am so glad that happened, look what I would have missed out on.

Let it Go, allow what is coming to happen, and prepare yourself for it, your journey
has begun, see it through.

[TheLostMind]

This is a lovely review.. Thanks :)... You are right - "learn from it, do not even think about
turning yourself off because it hurts to much, you will love again.".. Yes, you are right.. there is no point in keeping memories that hurt us.. We will have to let go of such memories... :)

[klawrites]

"Only if she promised, to leave me never..
I could lie on my bed, dreaming forever.."

This whole piece is absolutely beautiful but these lines above really stood out for me. So much real emotion and it is so strong. Many lines could stand alone and tell the whole story. We all have that one love that will always be on our minds. Sometimes thinking about the past is painful, but sometimes its fun to go back and pretend that the feelings are still there. Great stuff :)

[TheLostMind]

Thanks Kayla.. "We all have had that one love".. I prefer to move away from the past and let `time` heal everything :P.. I am glad you liked it.. :)

[Tasfia Islam]

But what's done is done, what's lost is lost..
The wound will heal, but the scars will last...

loved these two lines.....and only these,,, the whole poem is just perfect.......well done

[Angad Waraich]

Beautiful poetry.
But try your hand at a non rhyming poem.
You have true talent and Will do wonders.
Cheers!

[TheLostMind]

Thanks Angad. Will try non-rhyming poems too :P