I'm fine!

A short poem I wrote. It's not really good or bad, nothing to brag about and nothing to be ashamed of.

Everything's fine, I'm okay.
Keeping a smile makes the pain go away.
Everything's perfect, I couldn't be happier.
Giggle, smile, eat, repeat.

I should just give up now, it's not worth the pain,
I'm fat and ugly,  loud and there's nothing left in life to gain.
I'm a waste of food and space and water alike.
I am hated by all, to all I'm a dumb dyke.

I've been really good lately! Everything's great!
Yes I've been eating well, I'm gaining back the weight.
School's going fine, I love all of my classes.
I have tons of friends and am dating thanks to fate!

I can't do this anymore, I wish I could just quit.
All I want is for the pain to go away, I want to be free.
I want to show people that I haven't eaten today, not one bit.
I need help, I need love, I need friends, but they don't need me.

I've been really great, and I love life!
Thank you so much for being there by my side.
I've been taking down obstacles with a mighty strife.
It may be hard, but I'm going to get through life!

Author's Note

I've been facing writers block, and this is what happens when I can't set my mind on one thing. Please, any positive or negative feedback will be accepted and taken into consideration! Thank you so much for reading, I appreciate it!

Reviews

[Cladine]

I don't know what to feel with this piece.It felt like I'm jumping into two kinds of emotion if you get what I mean ? but it was beautifully written. I like it!

" I need help, I need love, I need friends, but
they don't need me."i love this part it's true on my case.thank you for pointing out my feelings tonight :)

[TheLonelyWriter]

Thank you so much! It is by far a back and forth. And I'm glad that you can relate to the emotions I expressed! Well, not glad that you can relate, but that you know you're not alone. I'm just going to stop being awkward and say thank you again.

[Cladine]

everythings okay and i really love it. thank you :)

[TheLonelyWriter]

I'm here when it's not okay, I can offer my eyes as it's hard to hear text, otherwise I'd offer my ears.

[Cladine]

You're sweet,thanks for that :)

[Personne]

Ahhh, this is a great poem. I loved the dichotomy between the two perspectives. It really felt that the "happy" one was the facade put on and then the other one was the real feelings of this person. I really loved this poem mostly because I can really relate to what it is saying, which, I suppose isn't the best feeling, but I can understand a lot of the feelings here. It really hit me deeply. This is a lovely piece, and you have talent, especially in the way you craft poems structurally and rhythmically, I think.

Thank you for the opportunity to read this poem!

[DeirdreInShadows]

This was a very sad poem to read but i thoroughly enjoyed it! very well done. Brave writing, as i get the feel that it is a personal poem, so i applaud your courage.

[Bare trees]

There is a potential inside all of us to be unhappy. Our subconscious manipulates us too much into that I think. (if we let it)

[TheLonelyWriter]

I really enjoy that view on things! Did you enjoy the poem?

[Bare trees]

I would say I understood it and it kept me interested.