WHAT IF

Try to hold your breath as you read this piece

The sun has insomnia
refuse to rise at dawn;
take furlough in winter.

The moon has narcolepsy
sleeping on its watch;
laid off from its evening job.

The stars struggle to pay their bills
beset with foreclosures

 pawned their diamonds;
too broke to get it back .

The ocean close its pool for renovation
requires all ships, sea dwellers
to pay homeowners fee.

The sky has post partum depression
redecorate her curtains
from blue to gray.

The trees are enlighten
realize their destiny;
shave all their leaves in summer.

The grass decides to join the union
went on strike in spring
withhold their stalks
to every beast that graze the field.

The cloud loses its business
to bitter divorce  
filed bankruptcy and ration the rain.

The earth have a nervous breakdown
diagnosed with OCD
hoards every aquifers in her bosoms.

The wind subsidize the air  
charge a copay for every liters
of oxygen that people breathe ...

by NeiL ArandA  09/26/14

Author's Note

A mortal lasts without food for weeks, without water for days and only a few minutes without air... Now you can breathe ...it's still free !

Reviews

[Troy Henson]

Firstly i tried holding my breath....didnt get there.
I enjoyed the flow and intent of this one. The world is a unique place and is capable of being it's own high maintenance necessary evil. Before we run we should walk. Take in what is in front of us and respect our grass roots.

Troy

[Woody]

absolutely brilliant!! both funny and scary. how did you manage that?
a very enjoyable read.

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks Woody. Appreciate your time.

[Briana O'Connor]

Woot Woot! I was able to hold my breath through the whole piece :D Yay me!
Anywho-
This piece is brilliant to the core. The concepts you outline in this piece are very intriguing. It really gets the mind working. I've always been a bit a liberal, rebellious sort, who draws my own views on life. This, however has never crossed my mine, and yet, it is something I could definitely see myself preaching. Love your mind!
There were some lines that didn't quite make sense with the tense of the word and adding commas would help with the flow. Very well done, sir. This is day maker for sure!

[NeiL ArandA]

Really ? Sorry for late reply ... Glad you manage to hold it that long ...

[Frieda P]

Very cool and quirky, brilliantly pen'd Neil....I think the earth has already been diagnosed with OCD though! :)

[NeiL ArandA]

I like that word.."quirky".. I need to loosen up sometimes Ms Frieda. OCD ? I'm afraid California hold the largest reserve of aquifers. If you live there they need to relocate ! LOL Thanks Ms Frieda. You made my day. Will return the favor ...

[Frieda P]

Ha funny Neil, my middle son and brother do live there, I catch your drift! Pleasure was mine...

[Sami Khalil]

Wise and very creative. The things we need to appreciate in our lives and that we all take for granted until we lose them. Humans should develop farsighted wisdom in daily dealings. Excellent, sir...:)...........

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks brother Sami for the read and hope it made you smile... :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome brother....:).......

[gabrielle]

Very refreshing write, Neil. This highlighted the things that we oftentimes take for granted but without which we cannot truly live. I think that this serves as gentle reminder for us to appreciate and be thankful for all the blessings given to us.

[NeiL ArandA]

You are absolutely right Gab ...Gratitude should always be our attitude . I just imagined that God is really kind good and loving even though things happens that we dont want and expect and deserve. The most basic and greatest necessities in life comes without a cause to us . Thank you once again sweet friend for visiting this page ...

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Brilliant thoughts or shall I say questions? Nice metaphors but can also be viewed literally.
What if...what if's..?

You are so full of wisdom, Neil. Glad you are sharing your gift with us. I have a favorite part in your poem.

Thank you for sharing.

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks for your visit . The lines came pouring while I was driving home from work at 12 midnight . I like the Tree part lines ... this was inspired by someone from hellopoetry after I read her short line " If Im the dust. How will I gather myself if the winds are my hands ." Its in haiku format . I pondered it very thoroughly and it produces all the ideas and lines you are reading now . Whats your favorite line? I thought problem will cause me not to be able to write anything but it was the opposite . Thanks friend for dropping by ...

[Lyn Anderson]

I love this poem. I have waited a while for you to put another one up. Nice to see you again. A lot of lovely lines and smart insights.
I would put a D on the end of diagnose (diagnosed with OCD) -- yes, so far the air is free, but someone may find a way to charge us for it if they can.:)

[NeiL ArandA]

Its good to hear from you again KLG ...Glad this piece brought smile to your face. Thanks as well for the grammar correction. I love when another fellow writer lend their helping hand. And Oh yeah breathe it all now before they impose taxes...:)