THE MOON AND THE SPARROW

 

 

The Moon And The Sparrow

 

A lone sparrow sits by himself

atop the branch of Acacia tree.

Longing for a love that would never be,

a mate for him, he would never see.

Looking up into the sky,
to the heavens he casts,
his deep long sigh.
"To what shall I compare thee" ?

You are the moon,
and I’m but a distant solitary star.

 Gazing and marveling at the beauty

and brightness of your yellow light.

 

Amongst vast grandeur

of heavenly, you are adored.

Coveted for your alluring glow,

talent and exquisity.

 

To what shall I compare me ?
I am but a mere candle in the wind.

A faint flicker,
in the coldest and blackest sea

... 

 

by Neil ArandA  10/27/13

 

 

Author's Note

Words and thoughts inspired by Belle's poems and writings.

Reviews

[Belle]

Neil, you gave me honor more than I deserve, I do not even know exactly how to accept all your kind words. Believe me, the poet behind those poems is also an apprentice of the masters from the past and is still trying so hard to find her own voice. The thing I believe that makes her "different" ( as you have said) is the world she lives in and how she manage to look at the unfair side in a different perspective - and that what comes out in her every poem. Apart from that nothing more is especial, you and her are both stars "gazing and marveling at the beauty and brightness of every yellow light ".

And do you know that you impressed her with your 8 series of reviews in just one afternoon! All are in depth- look on each of her poem--you, too, have an impressive mind! Please know that...

[Belle]

I forgot to say, SONNET 18 is my most favorite from Shakespeare. Thank you for this Neil. This is a treasure!

[NeiL ArandA]

Giving my sole credit and honor to the muse of this piece. Its amazing how a simple mediocre poet writing's evolve and change over the course of time by being in a different environment, surrounded by talented and gifted writers. I just want to appreciate those moments and sparks of inspirations...

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. Each set of lines could stand alone as poetry.
"To what shall I compare me ?
I am but a mere candle in the wind.
A faint flicker,
in the coldest and blackest sea."
The above lines stood out to me. You said so much in the statements. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[NeiL ArandA]

Thank you so much Cayote Poetry for these tender and motivating words. I really owe you one for these visit and kind review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome. I enjoy your work.

[Horizon K.]

To love someone from afar, where they are everything that lights the sky, and you feel like nothing more than a pair of watching eyes... With hope, the light will someday reach you , and you too will be seen as a moon... Anyway, the images you drew here created a lovely tale of unrequited love... But I think, it is better for love to be unrequited, than to never exist at all...

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks HK for this sweet review and kind words You grasped the feelings and laments of the sparrow . When you are limited by just being content of appreciating and admiring someone from a distance ...

[Frieda P]

This is perfectly lovely Neil, darkly reminiscing unrequited love. Music is perfect too. Sigh.

[Sami Khalil]

An adorable write that is fitting for a great muse or inspirational voice and befitting as far as words and imagery. Sooo touching and lovely...Excellent...:).......................

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks a bunch Sami. You are like a sunrise on this site. Faithful and consistent!

[Sami Khalil]

Wow. Thank you kindly...You are welcome...:)...................

[Lyn Anderson]

I take it change in font is for Belle - that makes sense, but for some reason I find the red candle distracting. Other than that, it is a beautiful write.

[NeiL ArandA]

KLG thanks for your sweet curiosity. Ok ...you have a good point. I will have it change. I'll take it as a compliment and a room for improvement . Thanks my friend :)

[Mockingbird]

conveys longing and loneliness. someone wanting to find love but thinks they aren't worthy of it. that's a beautiful picture, by the way. it's perfect for your poem.

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks Moc , sorry for the late reply . I appreciate you so much . Please be sure of that ...

[gabrielle]

the moon is enigmatic and fascinating in every phase. Perhaps, the sparrow may not be able to reach the moon in her domain but the moon at least accompanied him in its loneliness through her light. in real life, however, i don't find sense in comparing two unlike entities/creatures. we have our own individual strength and weaknesses. Heartwarming tribute to a beautiful individual who had touch your life.

[NeiL ArandA]

Gab ..I missed this one . But my sincerest appreciation to all your insightful reviews. I think I get what. you're saying . We can't compare apples with oranges. Your perceptive analysis could really cut through the cheese. Have we ever look on someone or somebody and saw yourself as nothing? The gap is mind boggling .

[Neon]

Yeah .. It does really work. I can feel the darkness of the write. First off, i'd love saying the pic. you pasted is very beautiful and well fitted with the words. Secondly, the theme, the concept's very you know kinda dark-type means .. very silent, smooth, peaceful, lone like that. Your stuffs're really very powerful and artistrically written. What I think is that you really should go with your this writing talent. Your cool.

Keep on!

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks Prince Neo. Sorry for not replying in a timely manner to your review. Your review really rocks ..LOL .. I wish I'm really what you said " cool " :) ...but thanks ... I will check you out too ...sorry for my sluggishness.

[lei]

what a beautiful tribute, Neil!

[NeiL ArandA]

Thanks Lei...appreciate your time reading this piece.

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

You know...I think that we can all relate to this in terms of metaphor. We are all waiting for that "thing" that will make us whole--for some of us it is love, for some, it is something else. Nevertheless, I believe that longing is part of human nature, and you have shown this quite well with this piece...the imagery brought home your concept.

[NeiL ArandA]

Ms Sarah, I thank you so much for your lovely thoughts on this piece.