No One Said It Would Hurt

A poem about loosing a someone.

No one said it would hurt.
The way you left
I knew it was my fault
I just didn't hold on tight enough.

No one said it would burn
The look in your eyes
As you turned on the engine
And we parted ways.

No one said it would sting
Looking to my right
Knowing that no one
Was holding my hand anymore.

No one said it would be excruciating
That you would love someone else
The way I loved you
And never think of me again.

No one said it would scar
The words you said
When you built a wall between us
Without even realizing.

No one said it would hurt
The way you left
I knew it was my fault
I just didn't hold on tight enough.

Author's Note

I'd love to have feedback!!!

Reviews

[The Seasonal Girl]

Ah the pain of losing someone, with the guilt of own fault living through every day. Your emotions are dark and deep, which I could so well relate to, or I guess, every reader would because we all have that one person whom we loved a lot, and just aren't together - with or without anyone's fault..

Your writing was crisp and neat .. pierces right through.. take care ..

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is sad and nobody ever tells you the downside to love.You have penned this from the heart:)

[TheLoneWriter]

Thank you! I'm glad that you captured the meaning that I was trying to portray:)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome:)

[EloisaWrites]

I love this poem, too. :)

[TheLoneWriter]

Thank you so much for all of the reviews! It really lightened my day! I'm glad you enjoyed my poems!!

[EloisaWrites]

You penned genuine feelings in your poems. It is easy to make reviews. :)

[melissa]

awesome piece enjoyed it !

[Jared Michael Smith]

I quite enjoyed this. In fact, I felt like I was watching a short film the way your images played through my head. The pain, the sorrow... All of it was presented with passion, and the repetition was very refreshing. Very nice, indeed. :) My only comment is on the first line of the fourth stanza: I feel like "be excruciating" doesn't quite fit with the rest of the poem, considering how you used short, one-word verbs with the rest of your first lines. Other than that, I thought it was absolutely wonderful. :D

[TheLoneWriter]

Thank you so much for your review!!! And honestly that was my main issue with my poetry because I just couldn't think of another word to fit in! Thank you!

[Jared Michael Smith]

You're very welcome. :) And I would try "cut" as a substitute.

[OnePiece]

Nice I Dead Like IT , Relationship Now A Days Be Like That
Question Is , Is HE still Worth Holding On Too ?
Grrr Jealousy Will Kick In , He Will BE Bac I Guess
Good Luck HEHE