Space Froze

"What doth being one of the celestial bodies of heaven make us believe?"

Space Froze

I watch as the stars float by our deck. 

With such grace and carelessness will I ever wade?

Realization is quick to snap to as if faliing and hitting my neck.

I know now that our mission was just another failure.

My assistants, or so called ''friends'', run screaming afraid of what is to come.

I know not of fear, I simply want to be part of this oblivious, free beauty.

Mesmerized by the dark greens and clouds as white as rum,

My 'friends' try to save be from this explosion.

In that instance I feel my body fly high.

I love this weightlessness that gives off not a care.

We will not be remembered as anything except the men who died.

For an odd reason I am learning to forget about life where I was.

Now together my ''friends'' and I live as dust.

Just so you all know I am not crushed.

The feeling within is one with the pleasures of lust.

Best of luck my comrades.

-Signed: Lt. Orion

Reviews

[Kelsey]

"I know not of fear, I simply want to be part of this oblivious, free beauty."

"In that instance I feel my body fly high.
I love this weightlessness that gives off not a care.
We will not be remembered as anything except the men who died."

Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. Definitely a 100 rating, this is unlike anything I've read before.

[TheLastEclipse]

Thank you. I try to make my writing unique :)

[rnuff]

there is such depth and power in your write. Very nicely expressed

[Sacsen Foote]

WOW....dude this is awesome, the psychological depth is amazing. the acceptance of death. and tying it all together at the end with the signature. chills

[AleyshaRosa]

Couldn't have said it better! There was an airy-ness to the poem that made death feel like freedom instead of imprisonment.
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[TheLastEclipse]

Thank you guys. I just want everyone to know how void I was feeling in this. lol

[AleyshaRosa]

It definitely shows. As sad as it is, it's beautiful.