Water

Water

I am the calm water

Trace me as I ebb and flow

I bring forth peace and tranquility

Refreshing everything I touch.

 

Delicate and flexible I may seem,

I am of mighty force

You may rest yourself on me afloat

But pulling you down

To the depths of the world

Will take much less than a tempest, my love

 

I am the calm water

But in this puddle only

Follow me and I shall

Take you into a whirlpool

And you shall be caught in my cycle

Spinning forever after

Pleasing me greatly!

 

Dip a toe into my vast world

And if you please, I’ll pull

I’ll reel you in with my currents

Bringing you effortlessly

Down to my sandy beds

 

Drink me in. Quench  your thirst.

You want me, don’t you?

Yessssssssssssss, let me explore your mouth...

Don’t worry, you’ll never run out of me.

I’m here to please your tongue

Whenever you want me to

 

Let me fill you from within!

And take over your entire body

Introduce me to your home

While I welcome you into mine

Your lungs are filling up with

My liquid lullaby

I see the life escaping your eyes

 

Once again, my kiss

Has proven to be deadly.

Reviews

[Sethnicity]

Refreshing! What a rush being engulfed in your thoughts.. I love the reiteration of words in the middle of the piece like a phantom wave followed by the boat turner. "Dip a toe into my vast world
And if you please, I’ll pull
I’ll reel you in with my currents
Bringing you effortlessly
Down to my sandy beds"

Then you real turn up the pressure cooker with this line right here!...
"Drink me in. Quench your thirst.
You want me, don’t you?
Yessssssssssssss, let me explore your mouth...
Don’t worry, you’ll never run out of me.
I’m here to please your tongue
Whenever you want me to"

Great write all around can wait to take another dip in your stream of conscience!

[Ahmad Cox]

Wow, so sensual and refreshing and full of power and emotion as well. SImply put it was marvelous beyond description.

[Blue Ivory]

Glad you liked it :)

[Ahmad Cox]

I am glad you liked my version of water as well.

[Mark]

Water of life, water of death. Nicely done. Personal preference, I didn't care for the font it distracted more than added to the poem for me.

[Blue Ivory]

Point taken :)

[cynthiabuhainbaello]

I like the changing colors of your font aligned to the retrogressing mood of the poem, intense ans truly engaging write!

[schnickythep]

Incredible. Really like your choice of font, how it gets darker as the poem darkens, then ultimately going black for the menace of the ending.

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks for noticing that! :D Hehe...

[Leigh]

Water personified and a great story told within, a lovely write, which I enjoyed very much and nice large blue text

[Blue Ivory]

lmao thanks :P

[zainul]

What an epic in the making!
Wonderful rhymes,lovely words,pleasing cursive,amazing colors and so many magical things in the fluid body!
Looooooooooooovely write.

[MOON]

Beautiful write, water is essential we take it for granted and abuse this resource . You have written a wonderful tribute and made it sexy.

[HopelessRomantic]

Great imagery and powerful words I believe my thrist is quenched

[Jasmine Thousand]

This is incredible! The flow of the writing is amazing, and I really love the font/color/and photo. The power in this piece is perfect.

~*Jasmine Thousand~*

[BLACK PRINCE]

I love the way you portray Water, the source of life.