Pride

PRIDE

You, little being

Tiny dot,

Dare reject me?

You, who was once,

I admit,

My glorious sun

Now, you have fallen

Into the dirt

 

Who are you to say no to me?

 

I rose the heavens

After you left

What did I have

When you were here?

And now I dwell

Upon the clouds

I hover over mountain peaks

Three years since I have met the ground

 

And one simple word meant my defeat

 

          DEFEAT! That I spit on

I shall never lose

Especially not to you

You lay with the lowest

Your ship has sunk

Bringing me down

Shall not take you any higher

Hurting me is fruitless

 

And yet it pains me so!

 

Those sharp words

That you speak

Pierce my heart

Put me in agony

When I’m alone

They surround me

And they haunt me

I cry tears of low self esteem

 

But I must shield myself to not feel this pain.

 

I pull myself up

Replace myself on the throne

I was always right, and you wrong

You shall be banished

My pride, though dense, but fragile

Who knows if we shall heal?

For this, you will pay

Pay the price heavily

 

You will bleed gallons, though I am dry...

 

In my eyes, you have committed

A sin sinister of all

You have dared to utter a word

That was never used on me before

And so with this,

I will leave you to rot

I hope you die

So your spirit sees my rank

 

Now you will never make me fall again.

Reviews

[Muse]

Even the most prized posessions...like God's Angels..can fall from pride. Pride drives us to be better than better. But sometimes vanity gets in the way of rightful intentions. Your poem speaks to the positives and negatives of "PRIDE" in such a beautiful way.

[MOON]

Powerful affirming write pride before a fall and yet pride keeps us strong too , so your spirit sees my rank... great line.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

We must not let those negative people sink us to their level... pigs play in the mud, angels fly n heaven. I love the confidence and standing up for yourself that you express here... we all have our limits to be pushed.

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you! That's a really nice review!

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome... it was a really nice poem.

[Kaya]

I really enjoyed this, I hated them with you, rejected them with you and felt the same sense of anger rise up, which is a reaction which i find rare while reading poetry. This is really good.

[Mark]

We give power to those we are angry with. The anger is fresh and sharp in this poem; not yet tempered by time. Enjoyable read!

[UnderCompulsion]

What a wonderful poem!!It is making me hate that person! XD I wonder who is this about...hmm...well the words are so strong,from the begging to the end.While I was reading it I had a feeling that that wrote some mystic creature.Great job! :D

[Infinite hexes]

"You will bleed gallons, though I am dry..." -oooooo thats gotta hurt
you show that a**hole !

[Coyote Poetry]

Pride is a two-blade sword. Too much can make you hard to be around and none leave a empty shell. A wise person won't trip over their pride. I did like the reason for this poem. We can let people destroy our dreams and desires. I like the ending.
"I hope you die
So your spirit sees my rank

Now you will never make me fall again."
Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[Cassie Fraga]

wow!! some strong words here... and I agree with Lily,
"You will bleed gallons, though I am dry...." that is a BRILLIANT line!!
thank you for sharing!!

[Lily Mae]

This is so passionate and powerful.. My favorite line is "You will bleed gallons, though I am dry"... what a great symbol..x