Roses At Your Grave

Roses At Your Grave

We were  supposed to be dead to each other.

But what does dying mean, exactly?

Isn’t it natural to mourn over your dearly departed?

Are my tears not valid?

 

You, on the other hand, have moved on.

On to where we’re told is a better place.

You said it’s Hell, though.

Just makes me wonder if that’s what really happens to all those who actually die…

 

And in that hell of yours,

You will be Tormented.

Instead of being forced to think about the consequences

Of what happened between us.

I will have been forgotten.

That’s what “Dead” meant to you.

 

Not necessarily what it meant to me, I have to add.

No, the ones left behind Never forget.

Never stop thinking about What Could Have Been.

 

So don’t be surprised

When you find Roses on your grave.

One for each day

That I’ve Loved you.

Reviews

[barricade]

Stirred some deep subsided emotions and feelings... Freshens some old wounds... This was deep, heart wrenching and beautifully sad...can connect to it on so many levels... You've penned a master piece of a write in such an effortless manner...
The end was powerful and gorgeous...
I loved it all the way... Great write...

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you, I'm glad you can relate :)

[kumars]

ek share arj hai, vo aaye humare karbar pe aur...ker chale gye,
hum phir bhe khus the ki aaj to uske didar ho gye.

[MOON]

Poignant deep write , the dead leave us to our thoughts. They are in a good place watching us always.

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you, I appreciate the compliment :)

[David Scott]

Could you ever afford the florist's bill? Or did love die so soon?
Ah, you make me fade into a cynical thought. Yet you beg me to remain tender and soft. What did you call for? I see sorrow, anguish even. I see anger. Injustice that can never be righted...
Twisted write that tries to look calm. The undercurrent is dangerous.

[Blue Ivory]

Haha! That's a good point, David! It sounds so romantic but it's not practical. There lies the difference between art and reality :P

And thank you so much for the lovely review :) I appreciate it.

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This is heartwrenching... to feel this tormented is a tragedy..
You have penned a riveting piece...
The end was, WOW!... Nicely penned!~xo~

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you! I added the ending on an impulse :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It was breathtaking... great to have added that!..really sealed the emotion for me..

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you :3

[ChristianM]

A lovely poem, somewhat sad. My only critique of the poem is that is was kind of hard to read. I think maybe if you beefed up the bold strength of the font maybe it would be better. lol
I can relate to this somewhat though as when my Grammy died, my Gramps married a crazy woman we all hated just months after. Thankfully he came to his senses and got with a lovely woman who is like a second Grandmother to us. But the question remains, do lovers ever really forget each other? Or is it them trying to forget, to bury the pain? Great poem!

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks :) And yeah I thought that would be a problem. That's why I made the font a little large. But I didn't feel like picking any color other than gray cuz it's the color of tombstones. And the other colors are colors of the occasional flowers that you see at graves. And your gramps sounds like a ladies man lol

[BAMchick96]

Dude, You are so awe-mazing at poetry.
Like the metaphors you use really capture what you're trying to portray.
All the questions in the beginning really make you look for the answers throughout your poem and it makes it flow so beautifully.

[Blue Ivory]

Awwww I wuv youuu

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

such good questions you have brought up in this wonderful piece. I do not leave roses at the grave of my husband as I know he is with me and not there. But what does dead to each other really mean? Dead in spirit? Dead as in really dead or just out of sight out of mind.........wonderfully written.

[Blue Ivory]

It's wonderful you still feel his presence. I myself forget sometimes that people who have died are really gone but I guess that's cuz I don't really think they're gone. I go with the belief that energy cannot be created nor destroyed. Only changed from one form to another.

[Sami Khalil]

A very good poem...:)

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

Yo are welcome...:)

[BL]

A very meaningful and emotional piece of writing full of the heartache of loosing someone very special. Your lines say it all as you mourn the loss of your lover, wondering where he is and who he is with and because you still care you want to leave him flowers as symbol of your love. I found this moving and very in touch with common feelings of many, the last line is especially good.

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you so much for your kind words :)

[BL]

You are welcome it is always a pleasure to read and if there is time review your ongoing work.

[Lily Mae]

This has me in flipping tears.. omg.. You are the best.. ever...xo Now can you just burn my diary? lol

[Blue Ivory]

I really don't know what you see in my writing so much lol Cuz this is what happens to me when I read your work!