Whispers

Verses read sdrawkcab
Whispers in my head
Ink stains on my body
I've been touched by you

Venom in these veins
Confusing an innocent little child
Music followed by laughter
Murmurs...

Why?

Reviews

[boundservant]

I can think of the worst thing that could have happened in this poem. At first it was my thoughts but other thoughts made me think of how I don't always like for people to get close to me and I keep them at arms length so they can't touch me but every now and then someone breaks through and they reach me. Surprised at times, sometimes a little peeved they figured me out and I wonder how they did it.

[Blue Ivory]

What's the worst thing, then? And yes the first one happens to me all the time!

[boundservant]

It reminded me of child abuse at first but that is the obvious to me.

[Blue Ivory]

Lol yeah everybody thinks of child abuse at first :P That's not what I was thinking though :P

[BL]

A bit disturbing if taken in a certain way and if thinking the worst and quite haunting and sad as well. There is not enough here for me to get a full picture of what is going on if I am honest, but you have given impressions that are more lasting than any permanent reference or description. Because there's the word backwards written backwards I read the whole thing backwards and it kind of makes sense as well, was that your intention? Secret meaning?

[Blue Ivory]

My intention was the journey that your mind was on after reading this ;) It could mean anything. To me, it was one thing. I love how people keep interpreting this in their own ways and coming up with something new. That's the fun of art :)

[BL]

It's a fun and open piece, that I enjoyed very much, but what was that one thing you mention? :-)

[Infinite hexes]

MANIPULATION

[Blue Ivory]

lol -_-

[Infinite hexes]

GOSH WHY LIKE REALLY WHY? hey I just got the meaning of this poem and it made me sad. This is really short but really powerful. And nice presentation

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I may be wrong but I see this as child abuse and the child wondering why them. Very powerful work.

[Blue Ivory]

Since you're the second person to think so, maybe that was part of the meaning. I just get random words floating around in my head, and I write them down. What I was thinking when I wrote this was spiritual conflict. See, in my religion, dark magic is done by reading verses backwards, and there comes a time in a person's life when they're starting to question everything about the world-namely teenage-so for a teenager to be confused about spirituality makes them they're young and don't know what they're doing.

[Salenora]

Different but in a good way! Very full on in such a small passage. It is very fullfilling. :)

[Lily Mae]

Oh there is so much I love about it.. so I just love it all :) the ink stains on my body..the venom in the veins.. oh and the little child.. you took me on quite a mind trip.. thank you.. Have I told you that I LOVE your work? :) xo

[Blue Ivory]

Awww that's how I feel whenever I read yours too :*

[The 13th Eros]

Your words do startle the senses. Those emotional places that do not seem to make sense, but awaken thoughts and feelings deep within. And yes, leave us only questions. xx

[Blue Ivory]

I'm glad you fell that way :)

[Jack...]

Very cool format and design structure on this. I like the emphasis on certain words and the straight forward pattern this takes. I have several thoughts on its meaning but can not pick one to go with.

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks :)
It can mean anything. I write whatever I think. Sometimes I'm just in a trance so I don't really know what comes over me when I write these things.

[Frieda P]

Love this, very clever....backwards is confusing at best, especially for a child, not sure if this is about abuse, or some kind of neglect but it certainly stirred within my mind. Good one Siren...love the format too.

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks, I wished to reverse it with photoshop somehow, but my computer is sadly a scumbag -_- And I'm not really sure myself, what this is about :P But it was more about spirituality than something sexual.