Whispers

Whispers

A Poem by Blue Ivory

Verses read sdrawkcab
Whispers in my head
Ink stains on my body
I've been touched by you

Venom in these veins
Confusing an innocent little child
Music followed by laughter
Murmurs...

Why?

© 2013 Blue Ivory


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I can think of the worst thing that could have happened in this poem. At first it was my thoughts but other thoughts made me think of how I don't always like for people to get close to me and I keep them at arms length so they can't touch me but every now and then someone breaks through and they reach me. Surprised at times, sometimes a little peeved they figured me out and I wonder how they did it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

What's the worst thing, then? And yes the first one happens to me all the time!
boundservant

11 Years Ago

It reminded me of child abuse at first but that is the obvious to me.
Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Lol yeah everybody thinks of child abuse at first :P That's not what I was thinking though :P



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Why indeed? It is sometimes a wish of mine to take all the hurt in the human race and throw it at the night sky where it might hit the sun as it rises and burn away. But then, how would we ever really know what joy is?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Good question! Hadn't thought of that.
Reads like an encounter with a pedophile. Creepy with tremendous impact. Great Job

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Lol thanks
Your free verse uniquely reflects the confusion within the narrator (starting with 'sdrawkcab' as i don't think there has been anyone to play this amusing trick). =)

I am assuming the 'venom' is referred to as 'love' or 'infatuation'. It depicts this perception curtly and lucidly with the difficulty of controlling emotions willfully. A lovely read this is!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Thanks I'm glad you like it :3
I can think of the worst thing that could have happened in this poem. At first it was my thoughts but other thoughts made me think of how I don't always like for people to get close to me and I keep them at arms length so they can't touch me but every now and then someone breaks through and they reach me. Surprised at times, sometimes a little peeved they figured me out and I wonder how they did it.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

What's the worst thing, then? And yes the first one happens to me all the time!
boundservant

11 Years Ago

It reminded me of child abuse at first but that is the obvious to me.
Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Lol yeah everybody thinks of child abuse at first :P That's not what I was thinking though :P
Very evocative and open, this could go in so many directions. You never fail to deliver quality poetry.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Thank you, I am honored :)
HAHA! you caught me, A*s sdrawkcab! :D Clever. Not sure I get the overall theme but still cool! Time to bang out another one!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Lol glad you liked it :D
Hmmm...Interesting. lol
I won't try to blindly interpret this one as many below have.
My brain is still trying to comprehend. haha

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

That's fine :) I honestly have know clue what I write about either!
well..twisted mind that I have I did not see backwards written backwards..I saw an anagram of drawbacks Still a very interesting poem that i suppose could have many interpretations

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Thanks and I really do wish I could write backwards in a better way it's just my computer wouldn't a.. read more
Dr. Wood ?

11 Years Ago

I love to play with words and your poem intrigued me..I am going to try a backwards poem myself..
Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

haha let me know when you do!
confusing as to what your are trying to say. explain?

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Who? o.O
Sethnicity

11 Years Ago

You! :)
Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Oh awww thank you :)
excellent, it took me a minute to figure out backwards, brilliant!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Blue Ivory

11 Years Ago

Thank you :3

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Blue Ivory

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