Whispers

Verses read sdrawkcab
Whispers in my head
Ink stains on my body
I've been touched by you

Venom in these veins
Confusing an innocent little child
Music followed by laughter
Murmurs...

Why?

Reviews

[boundservant]

I can think of the worst thing that could have happened in this poem. At first it was my thoughts but other thoughts made me think of how I don't always like for people to get close to me and I keep them at arms length so they can't touch me but every now and then someone breaks through and they reach me. Surprised at times, sometimes a little peeved they figured me out and I wonder how they did it.

[Blue Ivory]

What's the worst thing, then? And yes the first one happens to me all the time!

[boundservant]

It reminded me of child abuse at first but that is the obvious to me.

[Blue Ivory]

Lol yeah everybody thinks of child abuse at first :P That's not what I was thinking though :P

[Mark]

Why indeed? It is sometimes a wish of mine to take all the hurt in the human race and throw it at the night sky where it might hit the sun as it rises and burn away. But then, how would we ever really know what joy is?

[Blue Ivory]

Good question! Hadn't thought of that.

[Baby Ricochet]

Reads like an encounter with a pedophile. Creepy with tremendous impact. Great Job

[Blue Ivory]

Lol thanks

[Reeti]

Your free verse uniquely reflects the confusion within the narrator (starting with 'sdrawkcab' as i don't think there has been anyone to play this amusing trick). =)

I am assuming the 'venom' is referred to as 'love' or 'infatuation'. It depicts this perception curtly and lucidly with the difficulty of controlling emotions willfully. A lovely read this is!

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks I'm glad you like it :3

[Leigh]

Very evocative and open, this could go in so many directions. You never fail to deliver quality poetry.

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you, I am honored :)

[Sethnicity]

HAHA! you caught me, A*s sdrawkcab! :D Clever. Not sure I get the overall theme but still cool! Time to bang out another one!

[Blue Ivory]

Lol glad you liked it :D

[ChristianM]

Hmmm...Interesting. lol
I won't try to blindly interpret this one as many below have.
My brain is still trying to comprehend. haha

[Blue Ivory]

That's fine :) I honestly have know clue what I write about either!

[Dr. Wood ?]

well..twisted mind that I have I did not see backwards written backwards..I saw an anagram of drawbacks Still a very interesting poem that i suppose could have many interpretations

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks and I really do wish I could write backwards in a better way it's just my computer wouldn't allow it. It had many people confused -_-

[Dr. Wood ?]

I love to play with words and your poem intrigued me..I am going to try a backwards poem myself..

[Blue Ivory]

haha let me know when you do!

[Boy of the red]

confusing as to what your are trying to say. explain?

[Blue Ivory]

Well in my religion, reading verses backwards causes black magic. This was about spiritual conflict. About how lots of people our age "switch sides". It can be consuming. Also, tattoos are forbidden: ink stains on my body. And you know how they keep saying lots of things are Satanic? So it gets confusing trying to find what's right and what's wrong. And that makes us realize we;'re not as mature as we are, and we feel like innocent little children. That's pretty much it. Thanks for reading it though!

[Boy of the red]

what religion are you?

[Blue Ivory]

Muslim :)

[Boy of the red]

o very nice :) im agnostic myse;f, but i love learning about other religions and culturess

[Blue Ivory]

Oh cool :)

[Sethnicity]

You are Cool! :D

[Blue Ivory]

Who? o.O

[Sethnicity]

You! :)

[Blue Ivory]

Oh awww thank you :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

excellent, it took me a minute to figure out backwards, brilliant!

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you :3