Spirit

Spirit

I let myself fall
Through the night sky
Passing stars on my way

Would you catch me
If I had a physical weight?

I'm a wandering soul.
I'll only hurt
If you trap me in a body.

When you're here with me,
Holding me,
You are beautiful.
You almost make my spirit want to stay at night with you.
Next to you.

I can't stay...I belong in flight...

But you, you are so beautiful, my love!

Don't cage me, please!

Reviews

[fireblossom]

Lovely...the metaphor of a spirit floating free attracted by an earthly desire is strong. I think many of us can relate.

I wonder if this poem should be allowed to stand on its own without the affected text, color etc... Just a thought.. A very good poem.

[Mark]

"I'll only hurt... if you trap me in a body" That central line to this work is amazing. great work.

[Rahul]

I think you got a great talent of writing. I loved your first three lines which're damn goood and powerful here. your each words're being working here and floating as a pearl floating over an ocean.
great write once again "Siren" :) !

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks so much for your kind words :)

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Lovely read and beautifully penned.

[Sethnicity]

oh the wanderings of the supernatural.... Good luck on your journey!
Keep writing and keep flying.

[Mark]

Body with a spirit or spirit with a body? In this world we need both, ESP. To sustain physical love.this is a great piece , as it addresses such metaphysical views. Nice!

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks!

[bryandc15]

deep Emotions:)

[Muse]

A familiar cry..love me..but don't own me. Beautiful penning my dear.

[Margarette]

I 've had this belief that spirits tend to be lost souls but that's because I grew in a household where superstitions are practiced. I'm old now but I don't think I can still believe. You have captured my attention in your simple poem because I like how these involve inanimate objects dwelling in reality. This is great!

[Blue Ivory]

I'm glad you liked it, then C: