The Snow Queen

I'm naked
But you're a mist
So they can't see
And you surround me.

I'm dripping
I'm cold.
It's winter.
But I'm wet.
Still, you're a mist.
So they can't see
How you choke me.

These are simple words, right?

I laugh dryly.
It's carried by icy vapor.
To the others, I exist as but a sound.

I go to them in nightmares.
As a soft whisper.
They say I'm their dream girl-
A damsel in distress.

They write poetry in my name.

FOOLS!

What good will that do me?

I'm trapped here in eternal pain.

Free me.

I am your fantasy. Or so you think.

Tell me, if you love me so much,
Why did you never bother
Looking for me in reality?

What's this fine line between us?
Can lovers never meet?

I am your goddess.
I command you to free me!
I BEG you to free me.

But you can't hear me, can you?

You can. But you refuse to believe it.
I'm just the whispering wind.
And my form is just a blizzard.

But I'll be taking you with me.

Reviews

[pinhead07]

This is really nice. Really liked it. So many layers to it too. Love, the hopelessness of it, how it tears one away, emotional turmoil, how it's all around, like air, but you can't touch it, which drives one insane, in the end, the force of it but like a goddess. Beckoning. Yet you go to it, it takes you with it... :p

[BL]

Quite demanding, but I like that! Cool and elegant

[Blue]

This gave me goosebumps. Haha. I like the conversational approach and the overall quality.

[Baby Ricochet]

WOW! This was a roller coaster of words. SHe went from kinda hot to a demanding, clinging psycho! I've dated dated several of them.

[Blue Ivory]

Demanding clinging psycho xD Well, in the world of poetry it's normal for one to be that way, isn't it?

[A. Amos]

You can. But you refuse to believe it.
I'm just the whispering wind.
And my form is just a blizzard.

But I'll be taking you with me.

Sensual and elegant, loved it.

[Blue Ivory]

So glad you did :)

[A. Amos]

I really did great job and you're most welcome

[Leslie Philibert]

Like the use of fonts, good content too.

[Jack...]

Siren, I love this poem. I love everything about it. You have brought before my eyes things that I see, but don't really. Very well done my friend.

[Blue Ivory]

Thanks :D Imagination is a powerful thing, isn't it?

[Shaquana Adams]

I like the different fonts and layers within this one. The ending was especially good :)

[Ees]

Nice.
A lot of layers to this. Not quite what I was expecting for some reason and it is much better than I expected. I felt like the beginning could have been a little more concise, but you really brought it together through the middle and ending. Great points made. Really cool concept. You can't really be there and you can't really love something/somebody that you believe to be so pure and snowy white.
Loved it.
Great job!

[Blue Ivory]

Thank you :3

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

Found it!!!!! Is this it? It's really good

[Blue Ivory]

Wrong xD But thank you :3 Keep searching :*

[Not Your Typical New Yorker]

Huh, what page is it on?

[Blue Ivory]

Towards the beginning I guess

[Not Your Typical New Yorker]

I'm giving up :(

[Blue Ivory]

So easily? D: Okay.