A Dip Inside Your Mind

A Dip Inside Your Mind

You disgust me with your intricacy
When you let me on the inside
You trust me
What a fool you are!
Oh such details you tell me...

A blackened heart
That's darker than charcoal
More viscous than tar
One that you possess
It's polluting my mind

It's something that you want to share
It's a piece of your heart
It's your black diamond
Sparkling in the night

If I accept then shall we rule?
Is that what you want?
To make me your queen?
You'll embrace me with your gray clouds
And send lightning down to protect me

I'll sew my gowns from punished souls
Their screams are there to lull me
I'll tie my hair with veins not ribbons
The dripping blood shall bathe me

If I was to be your queen
Then this would be the life I'd lead
The nobles of the underworld we'd be

Such shiversome thoughts you share with me
They drive me to insanity
The moon becomes a sun to me
And the sky pushes me down

Little girls they don't play with fire
Rebellion drives us to it
And once my pumping heart will burn
Black diamonds will cover the sky

You disgust me with your intricacy
The details that you share with me
Of all of your dark fantasies
Swirling in my mind...

Hell-o Hades!

Reviews

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hmm, I found this consuming me in! Every word dragging me deeper and deeper into something my soul and mind are linked to. :) Only to be shaken and turned back to fantasy-reality :) Can't tell you how much joy this brought me. :) A link to the past I pushed aside. Aside from the Depth of this compulsion poem I really think you did a Superb Job by writing this. And the form railed me in narrowing my mind not to get lost inside, Instead leading me, guiding me through A fantastic world of wonder :) A well well Done Poetess!! Now all you need is a picture :) Hehe Thanks for sharing!!

[Blue Ivory]

Oh right I don't have a picture! I couldn't find one demented enough I guess :P If you ever come across something, link me?

[Blue Ivory]

Oh, and glad you liked it :)

[Carl Drake Barnard]

Hehe okay :)

[A. Amos]

Siren it's always a pleasure to read you my friend and again you did a wonderful job.

[Baby Ricochet]

That's one disturbing mind. I think I went out with her

[Blue Ivory]

Hahaha thank you!

[Jack...]

What a cool and dark ride I have just been on. Siren, I really liked this .

[Blue Ivory]

Well, I'm glad you did.

[Leslie Philibert]

Lots of strong imagery, like the gown line a lot ; a fine job.

[Shaquana Adams]

And send lightning down to protect me

I'll sew my gowns from punished souls
Their screams are there to lull me

These lines first made me think of Hades. Good job :)

[Blue Ivory]

Haha yeah I started thinking about him around those parts and added him officially on a whim.

[Nautili]

wow....this is a powerful write!!! I think there are souls that are dark and yet can be alluring and magnetic at the same time. I can relate....but sunlight leaves the heart at peace, I tend to gravitate to those who have a positive energy and are uplifting. But I haven't always done that, so I understand that pull mingled with the disdain towards this person that is a negative influence... I really liked this. it leaves one to wonder if it is written to the devil himself or to someone who is lulling you, enticing you to the dark side.

[Blue Ivory]

I'm glad you thought so :)

[BL]

A fair maiden has been seduced by dark thoughts and likes them and is now dancing with the devil and what a mischievous couple they go on to make. There are some great lines in this, a very well written piece, I like the theme.

[Blue Ivory]

Imagine what their children will turn out to be like! ;)

[BL]

Yes! Check their heads for 666

[Blue Ivory]

LOL! Good idea!

[BL]

Great poem really enjoyed it

[icelandicblue]

I had a feeling I was being led to Hades. It's a great poem on a Greek Myth...just don't eat anything. You've included strong imagery and I think the poem is striking.

[Blue Ivory]

Why, thank you :)

[Blue]

Fascinating theme yet difficult to write. You did so brilliantly.