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Some words I began last week took a new meaning yesterday, and I had a reason to put them into pieces.

Hardened, lucid through the desolate
but I get here through the sombre alone.
Barrens, enclosed like caverns
I wandered
In my strength, to many still feeble
as if they could possibly know.

Once I'd light a candle and wait;
Not today.
I return older, wiser and wintered
all for nothing.
Still the stars provide placidity
should they appear from time to time.

I have no faith in Him
as you have no faith in me.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

This poem speaks to me about loss of hope, not just in a personal relationship but with Him as well. Loss of hope can be such a struggle to deal with. I too look to the stars for meaning and inspiration as well. Nicely penned and conveyed with emotion.

Chris

[TheJordBaker]

Thanks Chris :)

[Fairy Khan]

Loss of hope in both people and Him is beautifully, yet sadly expressed in your poem. Nicely written, mate.

[TheJordBaker]

Thank you :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh my this is desolate, especially the ending...the loss of faith...human and otherwise...
I really like the "sombre alone"
I feel older and wiser...well i am older...i just feel wiser...and yet..i , too, wonder...is it all for nought?

i am hoping not...but am not always optimistic about that.
a very thought provoking write,
j.

[TheJordBaker]

Thank you Jacob