Wake up, splendid love and see me now.
I’ll cry for you darling, if you show me how.
Your ash-painted soul and heart of cinder
are vapid under fever but valued in the winter.
The yellow flower sways over your shoulder
and it crashes to the ground as cogent closure.
Lay back, splendid love and close your eyes.
Feel the soft silken semblance brush your thighs.
I promised I’d be better, you whispered ‘It was fine’.
I muttered it again; you said ‘Don’t waste my time’.
Your fragrance fills the cracks of my budding head
lying so politely on your bed.
Secrets, splendid love that we both know
are sculptured in my mind and heart of stone.
Although we know those secrets well
I’m sure that we would never tell
a body of the agony in these situations;
our stories of disarray and disrelation.
One day I’ll make that call to say I made it
just promise me until then that you’ll pray it.
Explain, splendid love, how when I blink
your body fills the glass and my blood the sink.
Breaking mirrors and no grasp on vanity as
wine hits the crystal and we drink to sanity.
Shadows liquefy and they move so alone.
I kiss your lips and I walk home
into the silence.
You take me from one supposition to another
I swing breathlessly from one vine to another
I like the unsettledness in my mind
the unsureness of my heart
it makes me slow down and savor your words and
question their symmetry and what it holds for meaning
I enjoy reading you
thank you
You take me from one supposition to another
I swing breathlessly from one vine to another
I like the unsettledness in my mind
the unsureness of my heart
it makes me slow down and savor your words and
question their symmetry and what it holds for meaning
I enjoy reading you
thank you
I’m laughing now...which is slightly inappropriate. I just don’t understand! Something has changed with you, I don’t know what it is but I’m glad for it. I’m not one for rhyming poetry because often emotion is lost in keeping in the rhyme scheme. This flow is magical and the emotion never suffered...not once!
I fall in love with someone who was ambitious...it was one of the things that pulled me to him. The promise that he would be passionate about something, that he would do it well and I could be in awe of him.
It got to the point where there was little left of the man I once loved. And I don’t doubt that he will one day be all those things and more. I just didn’t care to stick around and wait for him to come into his own, especially because his promise made me believe it wouldn’t be a long wait.
I was the heart breaking b***h to everyone but I wasn’t. I love this so much because it makes me feel secure in that...I wasn’t.
If I could reach into my computer and grab your hands...I would kiss them for writing this.
Also I’m glad you’re sticking to your new standard...only forward from here (looking forward to it :D)!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
am I allowed to thank you? because I want to lol. I vowed to myself after I had a little success tha.. read moream I allowed to thank you? because I want to lol. I vowed to myself after I had a little success that I'd use it as inspiration to get better and make every thing I write have substance and value so it can be the best it can be. Hopefully I manage that and I'm glad you think I am, it keeps me wanting to hit targets :)
It's nice also that my words can touch someone personally, it must certainly help the piece's affect.
I'm glad and humbled once again!! :D
11 Years Ago
Honestly, it is my privilege. I'm not a poet, I started blogging and that sort...found this site ran.. read moreHonestly, it is my privilege. I'm not a poet, I started blogging and that sort...found this site randomly and thought...why not. Reading your stuff is inspiration to me. I genuinely want to be able to write poetry like yours. So when I read something of yours and I love it...it makes me happy. You’re one of three poets on here that I am a fan of.
You can thank me, but there is no need to thank me for my honesty...the day that’s necessary, I’ll be a lost cause :)
well I'm totally honored and humbled. a little support goes a long long way in what we do, so I appr.. read morewell I'm totally honored and humbled. a little support goes a long long way in what we do, so I appreciate it and hope I can do the same for you. :) (I wouldn't have thought you were a completely new writer btw, you have a natural talent and original rawness about your work which I love)
11 Years Ago
I appreciate that, more than I can say...considering your awesomeness. Before my face bursts...I can.. read moreI appreciate that, more than I can say...considering your awesomeness. Before my face bursts...I can’t smile any more...it hurts :)
Write more soon :D
And yes, you are supportive and encouraging!!
11 Years Ago
I appreciate it too. Feel free to drop me a request when you have something new, I look forward to r.. read moreI appreciate it too. Feel free to drop me a request when you have something new, I look forward to reading your stuff :)
Wow, the whole entire poem oozes with emotion and beautiful imagery. The way your words sing through each line is also done amazingly, and the last line literally takes the readers breath away. Great job,Jordan
somehow we couldn't relate enough, and that was my fault...but i am better now...a better person, more respectable and successful...and i know how to love now...please give me another chance.
but...it appears..you have refused so i kiss your lips and walk home into silence.
I'm Jordan and I've been away for a while, but I'm trying to refind my voice and work towards a couple of projects.
In my late teens/early twenties I released two poetry collections which are avail.. more..