Trees make shadows in the twilight from the moors
below clouds of telic tincture I’ve never seen before.
And what splendour the shadows cast into shade,
some of the finest creations my Lord ever made.
It ruins the art work but don’t let it ruin your faith
when the unmerited marshes dare speak of grace.
Don’t cry dear moors at the words of those marshes,
although sometimes those words seem the harshest.
This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as your spirit doesn’t vanish tonight.
I saw a yellow flower dance in the wind one time
as the children ran around it with animated cries.
I’ve heard the early melodies from unseen beaks
to which I smiled having been humbled for weeks.
Below us the city’s lights all twitch in the breeze
and the stars above us are a glowing poppy field
each one a ghost of a loved one we’ve lost,
keeping our feet steady as we walk over frost.
This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as those haunters don’t vanish tonight.
If love’s stone is stalwart then which stone is mine?
It’s broken and fragile and erodes over time.
The world’s stone is substantive if ourselves are not,
and it keeps moving in time when our brains cannot.
So hold me close as my mind tends to wander away,
it freezes up when I have something important to say.
Mirrors are open and they show us our lives.
They show us the beauty of the world and your eyes.
This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as our love doesn’t vanish tonight.
Goodness me! This is beautiful...I love the way you ended every stanza...
"This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as your spirit doesn’t vanish tonight. "
"This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as those haunters don’t vanish tonight."
especially the last stanza...
"Mirrors are open and they show us our lives.
They show us the beauty of the world and your eyes.
This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as our love doesn’t vanish tonight."
And I have to mention my favourite lines, because they are so beautiful and they lingered in my mind after reading them...
"It ruins the art work but don’t let it ruin your faith
when the unmerited marshes dare speak of grace."
And also…
"If love’s stone is stalwart then which stone is mine?
It’s broken and fragile and erodes over time."
Sometimes I read something and I think of the person writing it...I have this picture of a poet and a pen, a piece of paper and some magic. That's what must have happened here. Nothing else will explain this. You're one of my favourite writers on here! I don't know if I've told you why i quote my favourite lines. If I’ve told you already...please humour me. I quote back my favourite lines, so you're forced to read them again. In case you missed how beautiful they are the first few times you read over your work. Just in case you didn't realise how amazing they are. I want to show you want you've done with words. Jordan, if you keep writing like this, all my reviews will make me sound like a crazy obsessive groupie. And I’m okay with that.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Wow Mia what an amazing review!! In it you've summed up the exact reason I write and that is to shar.. read moreWow Mia what an amazing review!! In it you've summed up the exact reason I write and that is to share my emotions and experiences with people who want to hear them. The fact that you enjoy my work completely makes my day and makes me want to write more and more and get better and better. So thank you very, very much!! :)
12 Years Ago
Thank you for writing and sharing, it's a pleasure to experience!
Goodness me! This is beautiful...I love the way you ended every stanza...
"This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as your spirit doesn’t vanish tonight. "
"This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as those haunters don’t vanish tonight."
especially the last stanza...
"Mirrors are open and they show us our lives.
They show us the beauty of the world and your eyes.
This beautiful world of ours will be all right
as long as our love doesn’t vanish tonight."
And I have to mention my favourite lines, because they are so beautiful and they lingered in my mind after reading them...
"It ruins the art work but don’t let it ruin your faith
when the unmerited marshes dare speak of grace."
And also…
"If love’s stone is stalwart then which stone is mine?
It’s broken and fragile and erodes over time."
Sometimes I read something and I think of the person writing it...I have this picture of a poet and a pen, a piece of paper and some magic. That's what must have happened here. Nothing else will explain this. You're one of my favourite writers on here! I don't know if I've told you why i quote my favourite lines. If I’ve told you already...please humour me. I quote back my favourite lines, so you're forced to read them again. In case you missed how beautiful they are the first few times you read over your work. Just in case you didn't realise how amazing they are. I want to show you want you've done with words. Jordan, if you keep writing like this, all my reviews will make me sound like a crazy obsessive groupie. And I’m okay with that.
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
12 Years Ago
Wow Mia what an amazing review!! In it you've summed up the exact reason I write and that is to shar.. read moreWow Mia what an amazing review!! In it you've summed up the exact reason I write and that is to share my emotions and experiences with people who want to hear them. The fact that you enjoy my work completely makes my day and makes me want to write more and more and get better and better. So thank you very, very much!! :)
12 Years Ago
Thank you for writing and sharing, it's a pleasure to experience!
I'm Jordan and I've been away for a while, but I'm trying to refind my voice and work towards a couple of projects.
In my late teens/early twenties I released two poetry collections which are avail.. more..