oxygen

oxygen

A Poem by TheGreatAndPowerful

i am fragile
polluted often with unkind faces and insincere words
the everyday toxins have made me decay and fall apart
but no one listened and no one cared
until you came along
and what once malnourished and dead 
became green and restored

when you’re around i cannot let go
i refuse
you are my life source
my oxygen
so i breath you in and fill my lungs
and hold my breath when you go

© 2013 TheGreatAndPowerful


Author's Note

TheGreatAndPowerful
im so fucking in love

Pardon me

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I love your ability to perfectly pin down your feelings in your writing while also conveying mine as well! It was a very good write and I enjoyed reading it.

Posted 10 Years Ago


This is such an expressive way to convey love. you penned this very well. excellent write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was awesome. :D I'm feeling the same exact way right now, so I really enjoyed this. The name and the whole poem is so creative, as well. Good write :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is an amazing piece. The emotion draws you in and hurts. Your style reminds me of Evanessance.

Posted 11 Years Ago


TheGreatAndPowerful

11 Years Ago

Well that makes me feel good cause I enjoy that band. Thank-you
Hahaha. This is a great love poem. I love the first stanza and how it contrasts so much with the second. My only suggestion would be to add to the second and make it a bit more fleshed out - focus more on the love than the disease of being alone. Make sense? Love it, though. Enjoy the feeling!

Posted 11 Years Ago


TheGreatAndPowerful

11 Years Ago

Yeah, I made it a little too sad. But thank-you for your review!
Oh really? Who might that be with?

Posted 11 Years Ago


TheGreatAndPowerful

11 Years Ago

Oh gee I wonder

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Added on December 24, 2013
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Tags: love, romance, breath, true, oxygen

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I go by my personas name which is Ozzy. On my past account I was Ayumi, and in real life it is Sami. I hope to get back into writing and felt it was necessary to make a new account and start with a .. more..

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