Apple Without a Core

You cannot tell me anymore

I paint my hair

I tear my skin

I ignore the tingles on my body

It is not a privilege

It is a sentence

The apple doesn’t fall far from the tree

But I am coreless

Because on this day 18 years ago

I became older than he ever did

Author's Note

I wrote this awhile ago around October.
October 25th, 1995 my father took his own life only a few months after my birth. So now being 18 I am older than he ever was. I get told how much I look like him so I change my appearance. But no matter what, I love him.
Not trying to get attention, just trying to explain where the emotion is coming from.

Reviews

[Carly]

This is an awesome poem, and it really made my mind race. Have you ever thought about expanding on it a little more? I think you have a really great start, but I also think there is a lot more you could get out of this. I know it's a sensitive topic, and it's totally up to you, but just an idea! Sorry for your loss. Keep writing!

[TheGreatAndPowerful]

I know I could expand on it, but at the time I was more focused on getting it down on paper before I forgot it. The initial shock and realization is what brought this out. The whole "I am older than my own father" was what struck me.
Thank-you!

[devon]

You've taken a bone chilling realization - "Because on this day 18 years ago/I became older than he ever did" - and turned it into bone chilling poem. I get goosebumps reading the last line.

I'm sorry for your loss, but I do hope you don't feel coreless.

[TheGreatAndPowerful]

Heh, you're right. That was sorta what built this poem. The October 25th I sat down and thought about it and went, "Oh...thats cool".
Thank-you for your review.

[Beverly Jane]

This has such depth to it, the emotion. This kinda tore at my heart, it was beautifully heart wrenching. Short, but heart breaking.
Good job!

[Liz]

"The apple doesn't fall far from the tree
But I am coreless"

I really like that. The last four lines are excellent. I know it must be hard to be reminded of your father, but be thankful and proud to be his child; he has inspired your writing, and we need pain to be successful.

[TheGreatAndPowerful]

Thank-you, I gotta say this poem was so raw I didn't have to reword it.
Thank-you for your review as well!

[Homesick_Nomad]

well done. I think no matter what you should be proud of your appearance. For if you wear masks, how are the ones who will love you most be able to ind you? Food for thought.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is an amazing piece. Without the descriptor, I felt it was for someone who committed suicide. It is an emotional and poignant write.

[Dewella~Vintella]

I can relate to this in a sense. My mother left when I was young, and I never really knew her; As I got older everyone told me every day I look more and more like her - I hated that. So, I tried all I could to be nothing like her, of course, you cant really run from someone you never really knew. Having talked to her now I have found that we are a lot alike -.- pretty much busted my bubble that I spent all my life trying to be nothing like her, only to turn out just that.

Anyways, lovely piece. Short and to the point, but filled with a bitter-sweet essence packed in each line. I am sorry, not so much for you loss (though I am) but for not having the chance to get to know what you were losing.

Again, wonderful piece.

[Mak(ayla:)]

I adore this work. It has a lot of meaning to it. And I know how you feel. I get told al the time I look like my real dad, and so I have done the same. Completely understandable! Lovely work(: Going in my favorites. Keep up the good work, love!

-Mak(:

[R. L. Hill]

This is pretty powerful. Thanks for sharing.

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Aw,this was so sad :/ So very good, though. I am so sorry about your dad. I lost mine a few years ago, so I know what it's like, that feeling of something always missing. Just always remember, don't ever let your past change who you're meant to be. Don't change for people, just be true to yourself. Everything happens for a reason, remember that. You can do great things if you just believe in yourself (I know that sounds cliche) and stay true to who you are. 'Cause you are an amazing, talented person :) Don't let anyone tell you otherwise

[TheGreatAndPowerful]

Thank-you for your review and your kind words.

[❤ Maggie ❤]

You are most welcome :)