Blip

Elevators climb atrophy lines
Bellman greets you with a colt .45
Shuffle in madness, confusion, and fear
Export loneliness
Import fear
Old pain, raliegh wave casing a star
New craze, sex phase
Sure there's a cure?

Reviews

[Mir]

I didn't quite understand what exactly you were writing. I think, as a reviewer, that if the reader doesn't know first hand what you were saying, then it would be confusing. I think if you added some more to this, it could turn into a really great piece!
Anyways, nice use of words. :)